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Oh yeah, this was just what I was looking for.

Really enjoyed it; felt the theme could’ve been a little more pivotal to the story, but other than that, I really enjoyed it!

A fun romp for sure.

Other than some grammatical errors, my only real problem was that I couldn’t see a clear connection to the theme.

Wonderful set piece for such a tale. Some of the action was a bit confusing, and I’m still left wondering where the theme connects.

Other than that, I heartily enjoyed it.

Fun story with a good flow, but I’m left wondering where the connection to the theme is. If it’s hidden in subtlety, it might be hidden too well.

I may be wrong, but due to the formatting, this might be disqualified for being over a page.

It’s a shame, too. I quite enjoyed it, though it did suffer from a few grammatical errors.

Happy to provide my services *tips hat*

The first thing I want to congratulate you on is the scale of this.

You fit four stories in one, chronicling years of a secret battle. That was great!

The character work was good, but I do think the plot was a bit murky sometimes. A bit of grammatical errors also could’ve been caught on another draft.

Still though, I had a great time! One of my favorite concepts this WJ!

This is a complicated one for me.

Taking note of the accident with the copy paste and not moving my rating around too much on it, I still found a few misspellings and grammatical errors.

The story was good, but with too little explanation: I didn’t know whose story I was following.

Overall I still really liked it, but it definitely needed another draft.

The ossified undead are one of my all-time favorite factions. I love seeing some representation for them!

Unfortunately, I think the great character work did get in the way of the story. Most of the plot happens in the last third, which definitely impacts the flow and leaves the theme feeling a bit tacked on.

Still really enjoyed it, though.

Oh yeah, this was delightful.

Loved the character work and overall story, though the battle with the swordsman dragged slightly.

Definitely one of my favorites.

It’s quite a mouthful, but I heartily enjoyed it. Takes me back to Asimov stories like “The Machine that Won the War”.

It’s perhaps slightly too complex; it’s too limited by the word count and could’ve used more context, but I heartily enjoyed it.

For my last question, I was wondering if you intentionally used the antiquated word “Induvial”, or meant to use “Individual”?

Oh yeah, I really wish I could have a bunch more backstory. I find the Angelic Kingdoms to be fascinating antagonists of sorts in general, and was happy to include them here. If we had had two pages… ah, but that would miss the purpose, wouldn’t it?

Glad you liked Elnora’s villain arc! I had a lot of fun with it.

Hey, I appreciate that!

I’ve liked a lot of the ways other people tackled “Close Enough” as a theme better than mine, but i thought my approach adequate, at least.

Thanks so much!

I really liked your story, too.

My favorite use of the theme. You stuck not one, but three different interpretations of close enough in this. 
Kudos!

This is a rough one for me.

On one hand, a story that is entirely composed of inner monologue is quite the creative undertaking, and the final bitter notes ring strong. That last sentence is a great sentence.

However, it seems lacking in connection to the theme, and it definitely needed another pass on the editing.

Still I overall quite enjoyed it. Definitely worth the read.

Hey, thanks! Really appreciate the compliment!

Btw, I loved your story!

Great story, good pacing, fun twist.

Felt like the theme was a little tacked on, though.

Great in concept and pacing, fascinating idea presenting it as a script; unfortunately it’s dragged down some by the grammar. Had to reread a few times to understand some of it.

Overall enjoyed it; just wish it had more editing.

Very good pacing! The action was explosive... LITERALLY!

My only real gripe was that it didn't seem to follow the theme, as least so I saw in the story.

Thanks so much!

Glad you liked it! 
I hoped my "close enough" was close enough to the assignment.

Glad to hear you liked it!

Yeah, editing was complicated, as I couldn't fit all of it for a good bit.

I'm so glad you liked it! 

I've wanted to tell a Frankenstein story for a bit, and this seemed to be the right jam to do so.

Thanks so much!

Despite it being cobbled together, I might be happier with it overall than most of my previous work.

Guess it was close enough... hehe

I thought this was great fun!

Duchies of Vinci, right?

Saw a few grammatical errors, but nothing that removed from the enjoyment of the story. On one hand, I wish it left a few less loose ends. On the other hand, I know as well as anyone how difficult it is to have a perfect story crafted in 1,000 words or less.

Definitely worth the read.

(Edit: forgot to give compliments on character work. I got a great sense of the leads despite the chaos going on, no given backstory, and no chance to express emotion outside of reacting to battle. That's difficult work. Kudos!)

Thanks so much for the kind words! I've wanted to do a Frankenstein story for a bit now, and this seemed to be a good chance for it. 

I'll be sure to check out your story once it's on my queue!

This was good.

Don’t see how it connects to the theme, but a good story with a surprising ending.

Unfortunately, I had to check, and this story runs 211 words over the maximum presented in the rules, which means it should technically be disqualified.

This is a massive shame considering how good of a time I had with it.

Always love some Saurian action, and the Mesoamerican flavor really added a lot for me.

Probably the lowest stakes on a story I’ve read so far in this jam.

Good thing high stakes aren’t a marker for rating and originality is.

This was a breath of fresh air.

Thank you.

This was solid.

Had some clarity problems, but the overall story was engaging.

This was another “tail” greatly different from the status quo.

I wouldn’t say it’s a great use of creative resources, more obvious and well supplied ones, but I dearly love the way this works.

It’s a great short story. Simple, good potential morals while never necessarily demonstrating the protagonist as right, simply devout.

It’s a good time.

I’d just advise dropping the font size by a point or two.

It’ll make up the space.

This gets the highest score I’ve given for originality.

I loved the premise so much.

Unfortunately, points had to be taken off for the clarity.

Still, it was a good time.

Had some formatting issues, but overall a good time.

Interesting.

Could you please point out some of the errors? I try to do a good job with editing, but was a little rushed this jam.

Thank you dearly!

I was originally going for more element-based spirits for the gods, but upon rechecking the lore for the saurians, frog mages thought of as gods due to magic powers really stuck with me.

Mostly some run-on sentences and a bit of drag in the middle column of the page. 

A few rough sentences of dialogue.

Also noticed a few grammatical errors (the professor’s speech opens with quotation marks but doesn’t feature any at the end, for example).

A few sentences that could have been combined for clarity (make quick into quickly, and the sentence could turn into Professor Cornacchia lunged quickly for an old man), but I can see the thought process (surprisingly quickly is a better sentence, but word count prevents some of the more illustrative sentences).

It’s not a massive deal, a lot of it is stylistic choices, such as the asterisks. I’ve used those before a lot, and don’t find them a problem.

Even without understanding the reference, I still had a great time with this.

As somebody with a penchant of latching onto too many descriptors, I try to be forgiving of similar stories. This might have had a few distracting aspects, but those were far outweighed by the good those descriptors provided.

Overall, a great time 👍