Definitely hoping for a sequel!
I really liked this, but felt it was a bit much to cram on a single page. I want to know more of these characters; Dov at least.
The indentation used for separating paragraphs is unconventional; I personally don’t like it, but it does work. I won’t remove any points for that, but there were a few cases where a new line was not indented, which did make the reading somewhat difficult.
Overall, it was really good; it just needs some more room to breathe (as a story to experience and as a story to read).