I had fun with your game.  I liked the commentary you snuck in there. I'm still not sure of its effectiveness, per se, but I feel you got a conversation going and that's what's important.

My only real qualm with the game is that it was sometimes not clear where I needed to go, even though the goals you set up were easy enough to remember.  That made certain things kind of tedious to do.  Other than that, though, it was a good time.  Keep making games!