It's pretty well written, except the writer keeps using phrases like "prepared to it" when "prepared for it" is correct. The writer also has trouble with knowing when to use the singular or plural form of a word. It sounds tough is correct, not "It sounds though." Sometimes the writing is so bad, that it is impossible to figure out what is actually happening.  

The girls all look good except they do not have wide, curvy hips which makes their bodies look underage and juvenile. 

Ain't is not an actual word. It is American slang and very annoying to hear, even if you are an American. It is low-class, crass and improper by any standard. It hasn't been used much in America in recent years and thankfully has nearly become extinct. The words you use in place of ain't are aren't & isn't. Do not use ain't!!

You don't drink male reproductive slime. You eat it. 

That move of Mako's was not a headlock.

You don't ready up. You get ready.