This was better than any award-winning story fr fr...

Seriously though, this was great! Love the art and specially the story. I really don't have anything negative to say about it... Well, I think you could have made the transitions smoother, but this is more a matter of taste than anything I guess...?

What I mean is the transitions when a CG pops-up. I feel like it would be better if it took 2 second for it to appear, and another few seconds before the text box to appear, so it's not only more impactful, but we can also have some time to appreciate it... Just saying this since most CGs appear REALLY fast, which doesn't make them feel important or anything like that.

Another thing I have to say is when you do a fade-in, I think it would be best if you included the menus (save, load, skip, etc) in the bottom. I just think it would be better visually and all.

You don't have to go back and do that, but it's good to keep in mind this when you do another game. Good job on this, and I'II be watching for more goodies from you... ;p