Depending on your objective, the context was interesting, the graphics had something intriguing, but the storyline was incomplete. I get that this is a short game but at this point, make it a little bit scary. Seemed like a joke at the end. You were breaking the narrative. On a more positive tone, I really loved the interface and the instability that came with your game. That was your strength.
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