Admittedly I wished our deer looked a little more... deer like. Just wanted to get that out of the way.

Really well constructed. I saw some people complaining about the word choice and the dialogue, pulling out the thesaurus, overdone, etc. I think they're wrong. Our investigator is just... Like That, and I think his verbose nature is established pretty early on, and I respect the internal consistency with that. I think it also serves as this further degree of separation he has with what he feels to himself. He's masking these feelings of loneliness and his inability to understand other people with a sense of superiority and intellectualism. Or you could argue that his intellectualism is getting in the way but I want to read the author as kinder than falling into that trope. Either way, the vocab I think is quintessential. 

Art direction is amazing. I love the prop, stage play esque look everything but the deer and the snake have. I do wish they were a little more directly related? The appearance of each animal matches the biome, but I wanted a little bit more tie-in from them. 

I think the concept is really good, and there's a little bit of tragedy that stays with me as a through line. We hear about all these people who have disappeared, joined with the snake, become consumed. And this old god says something along the lines of "I don't bother with people who still have hope." The last person who went missing was a seven year old girl. That's... such a young age to have so completely given up. Oof. That hit me harder than anything that actually happens onscreen in the game did. Still, it's a good set up, a good premise, and a well written ending. And I say that as someone who usually doesn't like horror where it feels like the protagonist never had a chance. 

I do think the final scene borders a little bit closer to fetishy than I would make it. Which I mean, no shame to vore people, of course, but it kind of had me more focused on the fact that it was fetish, than the denouement of ben giving up, and finding "connection" and feeling full. I don't know which part needed to be perhaps toned down a little, maybe the gratuitous maw shot, or the internal liquefication, idk. But that's just me. I wouldn't say I was offput, so much as just taken out of the scene. 

STILL! great work, good use of metaphor and design, unique twist on a concept, especially in the course of just a month.