You can really tell a lot of thought went into this: the holiday lore, the shared history between the two friends, the raccoon and the armadillo being complex characters rather than just one note, the carefully crafted emotional journey the VN follows. So you can definitely tell a lot of planning went into it,.

The execution left something to be desired however. Not just in the prose, but also in the way some emotional moments feel unearned? Like the raccoon gloating and the panic attack happen bc the outline says they happen then and there rather than it flowing naturally. Same goes for the endings: 

They both bring back the theme of the VN about the Package Day in different ways, which end up working against each other. We don't actually see the packages bringing people together, if anything it's the opposite. IMHO the SFW ending does it best bc it frames spending the day together as their gift|package whereas the NSFW ending frames our clothes and self-erected mental barriers as a package one must break through. 

Although it would benefit from an editor for the big story beats and a line editor for the general prose, as a whole it overall shows a lot of promise!