(Expanding on my original comments from the Game Jam)

 Wacky's sense of humor and art is always nice to see; it's a guarantee that you'll laugh at least three times during the VN. It was also unexpected but cool that it gets tied into his main project.

I think where the VN falls a little short, for me, and this is very much a personal thing, is that the plot is a little lacking in terms of providing a hook, and a lot of the development between the characters is skipped over. One arriving at the camp, the tone and the feel of the writing stays much the same until the "climax" of the novel/ending, and so there's not much in terms of contrast .

Wacky has said he would like to expand the story at some point, so I'll definetly revisit this on the rewrite.