It's a story and game with a lot of potential, but the writing is clumsy, the pacing is uneven, the use of what I suspect are non english idioms can make the writing a little confusing, and some text that comes off as homophobic (at least to an American player).  Even if it is all written with the best of intentions, it doesn't change how it comes off alas.

But like I say there is so much potential in the game.  A few more editorial passes, more feedback from native speakers, more playtesting, and my rating would probably be a lot higher.