Hour offers too little for a reader to latch onto. The choice to tell this story out of order is intriguing, but there's very little that actually connects its two main parts. Even the part where plot progresses the most is pretty basic and fails to deliver anything compelling enough. This project, as is, hurts for some restructuring and expanding for it to click properly.
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