Great progress!

+++1st person story telling. 

Makes the immersion maxed out & healthy adult content when it comes out.

~Menu Spam.

Having a lot of menues that covers the background makes the story less immersive.

+++The environment & clothing. 

Colors, the style brings personality & expression to the novel.

-The faces of the people are too similar to each other.

 I can understand it is a part of the artstyle but the drawbacks is personality & studies shows that people are generally drawn to faces.

---The Story. 

Plot, the protagonist, characters aren't emotionally relatable or interesting to me. Need drama or character development between loveinterests.

+realistic female body shapes (except faces). 

It is healthy to be used to realistic representative females.

Recomended improvements for 5 star:

More defining face, less chibi,  more femenine, less childlike.

Emotional meaning in the story & around the loveinterest to make the relationship feel like progress, relatable to each other..

Walkway, character click instead of menues that covers the background for more immersion.