Seems like it could be an interesting story, but my minds drifts as I read it. Can't seem to really get into the story. It is a bit disjointed in some spots. Character development is generally good. Some interesting characters. Some annoying characters, which contributes to making it hard to stay engaged in the story. Might check out the next episode and see if it gets more engaging.
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