For Build 1 of this VN, I found the writing to be monotonous..there was no real narrative pacing, no tension, nothing to allow the reader to mentally breathe. 

I find the characters to be similar. They're tonally indistinguishable at this point. They're all speaking in a similar manner and are all drawn with the same base pose. I think that a relaxing trip VN can be done without this being the case.

Rating: 1.0/5 - Awful

Things I would recommend revising:

-Cut out the philosophical monologuing at the beginning

-Try to distinguish the characters a bit more. They're all coming from different backgrounds and histories, yet they speak almost the same way

-I get art is expensive, but there's kind of "art whiplash" when you go from Phoenix's sprite in the sauna to the painted sprite/CG. Even the CGs in the files make the characters look pretty different from their sprites.

-Remove Russel's name from the text box when he's doing narration...it adds "noise" to the playing experience.

-The music feels like it's putting you to sleep at times. You're in the middle of Dublin, Ireland, home to fiddle and Irish Dance. There has to be some free music out there to sell the setting.