8.5/10 - Good read so far as of build 2. The first few minutes are pretty captivating, a great intro to the story. I think the quality of writing once you're going to the city is pretty low because the story is pretty hard to read for a solid 10-15 mins, which is rough when you're only 20 minutes into the story. However, once the story actually "begins" (trying to be spoiler friendly) it is an amazing read throughout. Love the character interactions, I think they're top notch. Also there's a significant quality of writing improvement, there's a good balance of actual conversation & internal monologue that I feel is natural for anyone in that position to have. I love how the story's progressing & I can't wait for future builds.
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