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Die And Retry Platformer

A topic by Delapaix created Oct 02, 2020 Views: 256 Replies: 5

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Delapaix4 years ago (2 edits)

Hi !

I made a little platformer with narration voice, 3 levels and a shinny world :

Will He Die is the story of a man destroying nature.

Walk in this world... going to collapse.

Will he die or will he rebirth to make a better world ?

Will you try something ?

The game is story rich, story is told by the voice of the narrator.

3 platform levels :

-Wood

-Concrete

-Pillar

Die and Retry to change the world.

https://delapaix.itch.io/will-he-die

ENJOOOY

Wechenbetelly4 years ago (1 edit)

If you told the reader what the game was about, your pitch would be more intriguing. “[E]cological themed game” sounds rather sterile. You don’t have to deliver a complete summary, but give readers something that sparks the imagination.

Delapaix4 years ago

Hi !

Thank you for your answer. I'll edit the post. The story is about our collapsing world. How should call it ?

Wechenbetelly4 years ago

Your pitch is a sentence long. There’s nothing wrong with that, but if I make a suggestion I’ve basically written your entire pitch for you. ;) In my eyes it’s important that one finds their own voice for these kinds of things.

Delapaix4 years ago

Thank for your advice, marketing is a real skill I don't own, I'll try to make a better one !

Wechenbetelly4 years ago

As long as you don’t overdo it, you can always ask your friends for feedback - especially if it’s not much to read. As long as they don’t say something along the lines of “Yeah, that sounds good…” their opinions will give you a better idea what works and what doesn’t.

… You might also find out which of your friends are terrible liars. ;)