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[v0.5] The presentation was fantastic. The impressively numerous assets and how tightly they were integrated really are a treat. Also helps that the art style is gorgeous and the music was tastefully curated. It all comes together effectively to create a somber mood. The worldbuilding is also done quite well. I feel situated in the pre-digital era setting and have a good sense of all the forces at play. The uh, romantic peak in Ch.4 was quite delicately handled, which I really appreciate. (satisfied heart something emoji) Excited to see what comes next!

A cryptic, yet strangely confident story that manages to be somewhat cohesive.

This one felt deep and open to many interpretations. For me, it was about existence and the passage of time. Lot of painful truths and lived experiences. There is just so much emotion throughout it all. Presentation/implementation could be improved, as I do feel the single scene and music were stretched too thin? (Like a picture book with only cover art?) Now if only I could read Chinese...

Very fun story-with-a-story. Writing is solid, as expected, with fantastic art and animations. The escapism was effective at drawing out the suspense/tension of the real world. I was dreading what was going to happen to Tyler the entire time. That said, I do think the dnd bits were a bit overdone. Maybe I missed some symbolisms/parallels, but for the most part it was a completely separate story that didn't really contribute to the rest of the plot meaningfully. It could've been any other story and I think it could've worked. (Disclaimer: I don't know much about dnd, so maybe I'm missing context for stuff.) The handoff between the worlds is well done and adds to the engagement.

Amazing art, clean/effective animations, and interesting world building. A little cumbrained, but I had a great time.

This VN is overflowing with hope and good vibes. Both characters are just so pure, that you can't help but painfully await their happy ending.

The title threw me off a bit, but will probably be resolved in the (upcoming?) 2nd part. Great art, cute dialogue, and a decently fresh take on romance (or lack thereof) from an executive's POV. The plot jumps over a lot of the romantic development, so the transition from introductions to first date felt a bit jarring. Interested to see what comes next!

ts was peak. Thoughtfully breaking the 4th wall (and the 5th, and 6th...), this VN does a great job of keeping you engaged the whole time.

Powerful allusions, heavy subject matter, and super uncomfortable vibes. The writing could be cleaned up a bit, but overall quite effective at what it aims to do.

The storytelling was hella blatant (you know from the very start what is about to happen) so the conflict is pushed a whole level deeper. Is Lucy going to fall for it? Is Mary actually going to go through with this? Maybe someone will break this chain somehow? The fact even all the other highschoolers know about it is wild. Sure, the plot could be smoothed out with more subtlety, but I liked how the creator threw the typical twist right out the window and went for something darker.

Quite a relatable foray into the gay social scene. The internal dialogue and awkward interactions really capture the disconnect between reality and the expectations that we build up from TV, social media, etc. It might sound silly, but simple things like buying a drink from a bar can be really scary! It's important to try things and discover ourselves, but remember to stay safe!

A raw, genuine lens into the life of a Mormon missionary in South America. From the endless info dumps and the deep insights into the MC's mind, you can tell the creator(s) is quite familiar with the context the story is based on. It was an intriguing new perspective that evoked a lot of nostalgia, at least for someone from a similar'ish religious background. Some good, some bad.

The plot started off with a very charming feel, slowly introducing the reader. Then when it picked up, it really picked up. I was completely hooked. The unexpected twist really took me by surprise and filled my mind with so many questions. But despite the insane plot progression, the plot remained cohesive. Everything fit so well together, from the tiny art details (omg the shadow cg) to the various symbolisms. It was just poetic.

Now to try and tackle what it all meant (for me at least). Acceptance of self. Reconciliation with religion. Reliance on others. The setup was meticulous: little hints here and there. And then the presentation of the MC's inner conflict with the rest of their world. Honestly, I was so engrossed by the "regular" bits of the plot that all of this was just added bonus.

Maybe I need some more time to digest it all, but immediately after finishing this it felt a bit, unresolved? Yeah there's the bit where he finally opens up, and how his companion swoops in to save the day (night). But then that's...it? What about the whole point of the conflict? How does Hartley reconcile himself with his beliefs/teachings? Does he keep pushing it down? I guess there's no (easy) answer, and maybe that's the point? Or maybe there's other routes I need to explore...hmm...

Not gonna lie, my social anxiety was killing me the entire time, but somehow I read on. From Swift's optimism/determination, to the variety of colorful (and fun!) characters or cause of the fact I've never been to a con, something kept me going. Despite all the awkwardness and stress, I really enjoyed the read. I felt safe the entire time, not sure how to describe it. Experiencing it through Swift's eyes was very freeing in a way, reminding me of my past social adventures. It was pretty realistic imo, especially how it ends. A very eventful, unapologetic lens into what going to a con might feel like.

Spooky. Loved how the little clues/details added to the suspense and mystery. Forcing the reader to click to Step and Breathe was a cool immersion trick. The art was great too. The music choice during some of the more intense scenes (imo) was...interesting. But the slow, eventual reveal of the plot and context was concise and satisfying.

Incredible visuals! It's absolutely stunning that the team was able to churn out such quantity and quality within the jam duration. Sheesh, reading this for free feels like I got away with robbery. Really enjoyed how the plot gave us the full context/story in such an effective fashion. Setups, flashbacks, etc. The m usic, word choice, UI (omg I loved the textbox!!!), it all came together really nicely to create that wild west feel. I was so invested and that final (literal) cliff hanger had me at the edge of my seat. Minor issues with some grammar and timing (auto would go too quickly on the ellipses, but manually sometimes I wasn't exactly sure if a scene was over yet or not). But overall great job!

This was uh...an interesting one. Can't say much since it got too intense for me, but seems like the creator(s) had fun!

A deliberately paced slice of life with some interesting characters! There's quite a lot happening in this one, so it feels somewhat like a (longer) novel. For some reason, it reminds me of when I read the Twilight series way back. (Which is a good thing imo! I actually liked that series lol.) The characters are all very likeable and I got more invested as I read. I do have to say some of the narration felt a bit too much tell and not enough show. And some plot points felt a bit forced (i.e. When they first meet in the forest and they say something like "Let's get to know each other!") I get the intention behind all these instances, but I guess maybe it could've been more subtle/natural? Overall, it was a great read with great art (the unfinished bits did NOT affect my enjoyment).

Choices in VNs usually stress me out, but this game...I'll make an exception. The dialogue was so smooth and genuine, I honestly don't believe that the MC was awkward at all. It was cute, the pixel art and low bit music, to the characters themselves. Then the plot with the cool UI and "gameplay". I honestly kinda enjoyed it, making the choices to test my own social skills. The plot twist was surprising and done really well to add more depth to the story/characters. Also enjoyed how cute the ending was. What a great game!

Such a bittersweet story. I especially loved how real everything was, no simple black and white situations. The addiction(s), social pressures, relationships, finances. So much nuance and complications with no easy answers. The time jumps were implemented very well, making the short story feel much longer. Also, who doesn't love musical cut scenes? Art was phenomenal as well. Not too sure what to think of the memory device bit, but I'm relieved that it ended on a positive note. Great job!

Omg! This was so CUTE!! It was such a great vibe, the art was adorable, the UI was a perfect match, and the sound effects were *chef's kiss*. The diary was such an ingenious way to give insight into the MC's thoughts. It was a simple story with simple characters, but everything was so charming. I'm a happy camper now.

The characters have an astounding depth to them. The way they talk, how they react to each other, it's all so refined. The reveal of the mirror was completed unexpected, but worked into the story so well. (The animation!) Flipping back and forth (a bit too much imo) and their manner of speech reflecting their timelines and contexts kept me hooked. I think the story felt a bit flat, despite being such beautifully written. But overall, this was definitely an experience.

This game was cleverly implemented, from the 4th wall piercing personal jabs to the wide array of puzzles. That and the worldbuilding plus the fast-moving plot kept me engaged (despite me reading VNs by myself at night...). Did I mention the jokes littered throughout? The art, the UI and the transitions/animations/programming were very clean. It had a lot going for it and I'm excited to see the rest.

I was initially going to say that the plot moved too fast and we needed to see more of what the characters were thinking/feeling. Then I kept reading...

My oh my. This was a lot to unpack. There were such depth and complexity to the emotions. The way they make mistakes and how things just go mildly south is so real. How we unintentionally hurt the people we love, make stupid decisions that we regret. They all felt so real and beautiful. I could feel all their love, hurt, confusion and I so, so badly wanted things to work out for them. Gah, I'm gonna go cry myself to sleep now, it's getting too late for me and my thoughts are becoming rambly.

Some minor issues with transitions being too fast and the music abruptly stopping that one time. I do still think the story could have been expanded a bit more. But overall it was wonderfully implemented. There were a lot of great CGs, and the sprites were so fitting for the characters. The music was such a mood too.

The writing was phenomenal. I was gripped from the very beginning, then dragged along by multiple emotions at any point. It never let up, throwing intimate moments, crazy reveals, and absolutely perfect art one after the other. I am in love with how expressive the sprites are; you perfectly captured the impressions of every character/expression.

The deciphering of the video was very cleverly done. It made so much sense and flowed so naturally. I was also at the edge of my seat (figuratively) the whole time waiting for the next bit. How you programmed it to sync the sound effects with the pauses was just *chefs kiss*.

There're so many ways you can apply the message of the story, so this will definitely be one that I'll be thinking about for some time. Thanks for the awesome read!

"He was just a good friend like that."

"He was like family."
"What was his last name?"

This story's got killer lines, killer looks and actual killers. The music was super on point. What more could you ask for? Well actually, I would ask for more. A large part of the story felt serious(ish), and I think it could've used more ridiculous. But overall, had a great time reading this.

The story had so much character to it, and the relatable events made it read so naturally. I especially adored their relationship and the accurate mega church experience. Then the bits with the game and the little cutscenes, my gosh they had me hooked! Only critique is that some of the transitions/time jumps were slightly confusing. That and the fact that I need more!

Very magical atmosphere, until it turned dark at the end... Loved how detailed the art was and the refined, mysterious feel it gave off. Story was interesting too, leaving me curious about what'll happen next.

Intriguing blend of furry isekai, severence, and lethal game show. The art was pretty cute and the characters had decent personalities. I wouldn't mind having that uniform for work.

I recognize that it's a WIP, but the start felt a bit rushed/forced. It does improve later on though. The MC's thoughts are quite jumpy, but I suppose that matches up with the ADHD...hmm...

Thanks for the review and glad that you enjoyed it!

Jaw dropping visuals from the very start. And it does not let up. One lovable character after another, each delivering precisely tailored lines to craft the most heartwarming world possible. There's silliness, depth, kindness, all sorts of emotions. Like a good, good dream.

Vibrant visuals and colorful prose. Though the plot was a bit straightforward, every line felt was well written and almost poetic. The music did its job behind the scenes and perfectly complemented the mood. Only thing that felt a bit off was how fast the transitions were. Great job!

Very cute story and detailed sexy time. Appreciated how the latter pushed beyond generic porn and embraced certain more "flavored" aspects. That and the realistic rendition of being a fan of and interacting with (retro) tech carried this game.

Very cool space game! Love all the attention to the sciency bits. The amnesia thing was also effective in slowly revealing the context to the reader. This is definitely a larger project, so I'm excited for your next build!

Wow, cute characters. Interesting plot and charming dialogue. And oh, oh my...that escalated quickly, uh. I guess our horned MC knows what he wants.

A very cute, fantasy romance. The outfits were well done and the plot flowed quite nicely (and there was a good amount of it too!). The inevitable pairing of the MCs was quite entertaining/hilarious to watch unfold. To be a bit more critical, the story does focus on this relationship a lot, perhaps a bit too much. The rest of the plot is largely pushed to the side in favor advancing the romance. Then there's Dido's flippy floppy performance at the end? But overall, I had a great time in the stream.

Very cool visuals. Like others have said, the transition was done really well to build up that tension. The dialogue for the most part was interesting, though the subjects themselves were kinda typical. Have to say, I wasn't really sure what the premise of the story was until I looked at the Content Warnings and people's comments. Still not too sure what the point was...

This was honestly quite a fun read. The dialogue was fast, natural, and cryptic (for an unc like myself 😔). Music, font, and art were all tastefully selected/created. Only issue really is that the plot didn't really go anywhere. Maybe the other 2/3rds will complete it, but as it stands, it reads more like a vlog than a crafted story. But overall, well done, especially for a 1-person team.

Thank you for playing! It was a fun first project. 😁

Very much on brand, and with a surprising amount of plot to boot. It was hilarious how serious it was, despite how ridiculous all the plot points were. Story otherwise was quite simple with the message being reject capitalism?... I had fun reading this.

No idea what to say, loved every bit of it. CGs, music, how the plot slowly unfolds, the perfectly timed flashbacks, the writing, even the content warning was on point lol. The fact that you completed this on your own is just a masterclass.

The adjusting viewport and NVL(?) mode were very well done! Very interesting method of moving the text and shifting the viewer's focus instead of manipulating the sprites. The dialogue also felt quite satisfying, like I would not have guessed what they were going to say/do.

That said, I do think the pacing was a bit too uniform/nonstop. There was no time to breath, and we were whisked from one line after another. Also, it was an interesting plot, but I kinda didn't see a point to the story other than it being a meme? Maybe the conversation with Gabriel was supposed to deliver some message and I zoomed past it? (If so, maybe slowing it down there could've helped.

But overall, I enjoyed it. It was a fun, short read as promised.