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I see you sent another comment that revises this, you ok if I delete this one?

Haha, thanks.

I think I saw this was your first time writing a mothership module? You can’t tell. This is a very solid entry. Great care and attention on layout and design, you used very effective artwork that conveyed the themes without distracting. There are a number of concepts delivered all at once, as someone else pointed out, but I think that’s largely fine. There isn’t so much going on here that a warden couldn’t keep it sorted with a dash of book keeping. It feels very active, like this is happening on a clock and I can see where the players are start freaking out, stacking stress, and searching for the exits. The only thing I don’t really feel was super strong here was the Ancient Mythology theme. I guess the Solarian church and the remnants of the 500 year old civilization were the lead in on that? Didn’t feel super ancient, but I got the mythology from it. Either way, great job, solid entry.

Well, I love the themes here. Big fan of the use of a slick world to recreate the mythic Greek underworld. I found the center aligned text pretty distracting, I’d probably revisit that design decision. The styx water is overpowered from a purely mothership perspective, though I have to admit that the idea of removing conditions along with memories is titillating. I like the effect you were reaching for with the map, I don’t think it landed exactly but it was a bold decision and evokes a certain slick world advertising hell that I appreciate. You have some pretty inconsistent formatting for key concepts throughout the document and naming, which would hurt utility in general. I like the weapons table and random encounters, they seem like fun additions to the game. Last constructive note is you make a note to trigger Stress, but that doesn’t really tell the warden what happens. The common language is gain 1 Stress, or Fear Save or gain 1d5 Stress. A good entry, I look forward to seeing your future endeavors.

Its a cool idea, a downtime location that draws the characters in to relieve stress but has a kind of modern sinister AI seduction racket going on. I found the menu on the back pretty unreadable, a script font at that size, light on dark was a challenging decision to justify. Some of the writing suffered from strange arrangement and could have been more brief and more evocative, though overall I like the subject and how it was presented. I am stoked you chose the Nymph as your ancient myth, its a classic and doesn’t get enough play in adventures. Solid entry.

Hey thanks, I really enjoyed working on this and I’m glad the familiar character style components worked as an analogy for the ship, I think in some cases it makes it a little shallow in this form, but it’s a trifold so I won’t hold myself to too high a standard. Either way, thanks for checking it out.

Thanks for checking it out! The original idea for this was to make a generation ship campaign that told the story of a group of characters and their progeny as they hurtled through space towards a new distant home, the whole while slowly becoming more and more aware of the vampiric billionaire overlords who lived in the “cryo-pods” above the command deck. An unwitting population of human cattle for their astrophage masters. Maybe I’ll cook that out at some point. Just needed a toolkit for thinking about g ships first though.

So, I’ve added hexanote digest, which is 5.5 x 8.5, it should print booklet format, I used .25 inch margins. Let me know if that doesn’t work for whatever reason.

Any chance of getting a print run of this?

I’ll get on it.

You could 100% write script for Harrison Ford, very authentic voice in the Indie’s Sending hand out. The trials are really fun! Well written and zany implementations will definitely keep the party and the GM on their toes. Shout out to the Shadows of Camelot plug, always be pushing books! Always great stuff from you Will, keep it up.

I also consider you a friend. Thanks for the thorough review. Good call out all around here. I’ll definitely implement some of these ideas after the judging wraps up.

No, you’re AWESOME!

Thanks man.

Digest is 8.5/5.5 which is much closer to A5. A4 is more like letter size.

So creepy! I love the cleaver deal. Awesome work.

Thanks :)

Ha, thanks! The first time I found an orc printer in game my character pooped themselves. I wanted to share that joy with the world.

Thanks, I’m glad you like it! @drmhigginson did such amazing artwork, and came with a great idea, I was just lucky to contribute.

Agreed, I can’t wait to play more of this game. Glad you like it.

I’ve run it duet and with up to 3 players. OSR tends to care less about balance per se, and seeking the non combat solution is a good idea in this adventure either way.

Hey boss, can I get in that Discord? Love your work.

Awesome! You’ll have to tell me how it goes at the table!

Sweet, thanks. Glad you like it.

Oh wow, thanks so much. I was super inspired by your work. Can’t wait to play some and excited for the Kickstarter shipping!

I played this class and had a blast. Pretended I was a scientist and just got more and more murderous as the game went on. Very fun mind set. At adventure’s end I took the identity of one of the NPCs that didn’t survive, like a hermit crab for documents.

These are truly amazing. Thanks for sharing them with the world.

Thanks! Yeah I was imagining the eyeball is from an AI titan of the last last age, the collapse before the collapse, and crawling around inside an eyeball dungeon sounded fun to me :D

Yeah, let me know if there are any adjustments needed. TBH I did the same thing and ended up just making my own, so now we are here.

Hey, love this. I used it to run a bit of solo fun. Great work.

I’m pretty sure lex came up with them all.

If I’m being honest, I sort by Most Karma and rate from the top. That way those who are doing active rating are getting their return.

Top tier. No notes.

Astounding.

Incredible work. Very cool ideas throughout. Impressive design, art, and cartography elevate the already solid text. Bravo.

Cool thanks, glad you like it. Yeah that alternate entrance for the hen house is in case your part decides to climb the outside of the mountain, they can technically go all the way to the top and climb in through the horn as well, though I think that may not have made it into the image (or the text).

This is neat. Its a cool little pocket dimension generator thing. I like it. I think the writing could benefit from a bit more specificity, but all told this looks fun to run. Great job.

This has some amazing ideas in it. Well thought out. Very difficult to read at 100%, font was just too small. Art and writing both super solid.

Yeah, I’m looking at one that is 20 pages long, pretty sure its not an a6. I’ll keep an eye out though. Do love me a pocket mod!

Nice work, this slaps.