Cool concept. I would love a period lighthouse as opposed to a modern one. I would love a sentence or two setting up the Land Locked Lighthouse would be a fab, a myth or fable about it that travelers tell.
Great idea!! Love a building that moves through space. Would love of sentence or two describing why magic moves it. Would love to see a black n white + pink n yellow version. Would love to know if there is a way to stop the temple from moving or destroy the temple in some conflagration by destorying the prism or something.
Great start. Needs a little more detail (like trap damage). Also, feels a little modern, like it exists in the 21st century, things like the trash dumpster. Maybe replace the trash dumpster with a well or an cesspits
Really great start. I love that you give us 4 dif versions of the project. For the final, I would love a dif font for the body of text. The Chomsky-esq font is great for titles and headers but is hard to read when it is the body of the text. The love the high level concept. I want some deets on the man in the iron mask; it can just be a single sentence.
It is soooooo good. I would love for the layout to be a little more Mork-ified. I would love a piece(s) of art for the hare, mouse and the tea cup. I would love a sentence or two describing the origin of "the curse of the hatter", and front load that at the start of the adventure.
Really good. I just want a little more. A small map of the island or the ship. Maybe stats for the wicked monks. Instead of saying Midsommer, maybe just a sentence or two describing Midsommer-esque events.
I want a little more... like a table of possible plots of the fish people... just a little more juice. Also... if we can re-name the chanter monster something else, that would be fab.,
Very silly and fun. I want just a little more juice about this class, a little more of what makes it tick. Might only be a single sentence, but I want it :)
Fun little adventure. I want a little know a little bit more about the troglodytes. Even just a single sentence. Are they raiders? Refugees? Are they all siblings, like a single clutch of Trogoldytes? As for color, I the green is cool, but I wish it was BnW, yellow and / or pink. I love the MB color palette, it instantly lets you what you are reading. In a full size book, you can totally break the color palette, but in a single A4, I feel you need to stick to the palette. Now... what are we going to do about that giant follicle?
This is might be my favorite thing I have read during the jam. I wish the numbering system of the city locations was laid out differently (essentially 10s place was the quarter and 1s place the ring / district). But otherwise this is an amazing product. It feels like Mork Borg, I will definitely be using this in my home game.
