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thank you for your thoughtful comments. I wanted to make this look and read like something from the 80s and the early days of D&D, so the art, layout and writing reflect that - I hope! Like something that would be near the back of an early Dragon magazine. 

I thought about making the adventure about “stopping” the Zimri, but in the end thought making the Zimri less obvious bad guys was more interesting. And if “Zimri the Wizard” is truly a victim, then he’s a pretty happy and complicit one!

thanks for your comment and taking the time to read my submission!

kind of feel like if a player is crazy enough to fight a naga at low levels then death should be on the menu, haha. Personally, I hope players choose to rout the cultists instead!

Thanks so much for taking the time to read it and comment. Yes I loved leaning into the “Appendix N” vibe of weird, pulp fantasy. And really enjoyed reading your submission too!

hey thanks for your comment and I appreciate the critique! It’s kind of you to take the time :)

my approach has always been to do the heavy lifting for a GM, but leave some space for the GM to make it their own. I don’t want to lock a GM into doing one certain thing when that one thing might not gel for their game and their players.  This one is definitely not “no prep” as it’s a novel situation and not just a standard dungeon crawl. GM would have to read this first, for sure. And hopefully inspired  to flesh it out a bit to run for their own group. :)

This is very charming. Great work especially the layout. 

The map is incredible. It’s a cool set-up for all sorts of shenanigans. Good pulp vibe and very eye-catching. List of NPCs is terrific but there’s a lot of them. My humble suggestion: put the dramatis personae before the map, and the key after the map. 

Terrific pulp vibe throughout, solid writing and just enough variety of things to do and explore. Awesome map. Bonus points for including lizardmen! You nailed the assignment, love this to death

That’s awfully kind, thanks. I really enjoyed your adventure too! You’ve got talent to spare

it’s cool!

Friend! Thanks for letting me know this. I fixed it and uploaded the correct version (digital). I hope you check it out!

Good layout and setting. I get some Dark Sun vibes, which is neat-o. My honest critique only: too unbalanced for L1 characters. Random encounter sunlight attack that’s DC 18 DEX or 2d6 damage with no clear way to avoid it altogether,  spike pit that is 18 DEX to avoid for some reason. Falling is is 18 CON or “you die.” Stuff like that. There’s so much of it.

I like. Fits a lot into 8 pages and none of it is bad.

This is one of the best I have seen. Feels OSR, and it’s for factions, good writing. Decent map. The real deal.

it’s useable. Not super original but it would run fine. Extra point for hand drawn map.

It’s good. It’s useable. Nicely done!

I like it. Definitely could run it. Nice random encounter table that makes sense for the site.

I love the presentation. And writing. Really well designed. Stands out from a lot of products that really just look the same. Keep making stuff!

creative scenario, nice map and cover image. Good stuff!

it’s good, it’s useable!

this is great. better than the many character class entries I’ve seen. My only quibble is that the class is a desert wanderer that eats mushrooms. Not many mushrooms in a desert.

Nice idea! Would be fun to just give these to players and have them try to figure out why they lost CON. Wonder if they would ever notice the torch hasn’t gone out, haha.

why the derelict king? I feel like if that’s in the title it should be explained somewhere. Clean design, easy to use. I like it.

very cool. Will actually use this and it will be a very memorable encounter. 

I like weird stuff, this gets a lot of love from me.

it looks awesome, really sweet design and layout. My honest critique: I don’t see a lot of Shadowdark ruleset incorporated. Like, hardly any. So it would be tough for me to use this without a lot of prep of my own.

I like it a lot! Nice and whimsical like old DnD. Great layout and design, but the black motif makes it feel more scary/serious than it is, that’s just my opinion. Overall really nice and I am happy I downloaded this.

I like it a lot, cool ideas, good art. Need more stuff on how to run this with Shadowdark

really well done. Great art, enhances the feeling of the adventure. I would use this!

Nice, simple 2 pager dungeon. Awesome title. 

Very creative. So glad I downloaded this. The title sounds so dry, though. Was that intentional? I was pleasantly surprised!

I admire this for the good writing and layout. Well done!

Fits a lot into 8 pages and doesn’t feel messy! Well done.

Well written and designed! 

I dig this a lot. It’s original in concept and stands out from the crowd.

good layout, good art. Cool concept. Clean presentation and good writing. My opinion only:  Ultimately an overpowered class, though. Being outnumbered in OSR usually means the players should run or get creative, but this class actually rewards getting into those fights. For me, too much like 5e.

good layout and nice to see a group of thematic character classes together. I like the art and layout. As a GM, I would use these as “class as character” NPCs with some tweaking.

Great job! Really well designed, some good foreshadowing. Random encounter table that includes something unique - it’s not lazy. Excellent writing. A GM could run this, definitely. This is really one of the better submissions I’ve seen.