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I have major soft spot for sympathetic, noble vampires so naturally I loved this entry.  By using descriptions of senses beyond sight you've created a very vivid world, and then giving deGiaours' history within that world makes it come alive.  Excellent work.

Great characterisation of DeSousa here, to create a convincing and compelling villain in such a short space is no easy task.  I would love an extended version of this featuring more of DeSousa and her motivations, and more of the missionaries settlement and eventual take over of Calamvor, so as to give more context to the epilogue.

What a fantastic bit of storytelling in such a small space.  Your prose is tight, clear, and engaging.  

With only one thousand words to work with it can feel like walking a tight rope when handling the theme.  It can be all to easy to either lose it by being too subtle, or to end up beating readers over the head with it.  I personally feel that making it more obvious is the better choice though.  Thanks for the feedback!

I think it can be all too tempting to fall into the GW style of Cockney football hooligan orks, so I'm always happy when someone writes them in a more novel way.  

Very fair feedback and I appreciate you taking the time to go so in depth.  I do find when writing that I don't have a difficult time finding my tone, and I'm thankful for that, but maybe it's time to start challenging myself  instead of going to the default.  Thanks again, glad you liked it!

This was super cool.  Making us sympathise with a faction that is so monstrous at face value is no easy task, and the subtle worldbuilding was well done.

I had thought of a similar idea to this story when the theme was announced, but went in a different direction.  I'm glad to that someone else had the same idea and followed through with it!

I always like the stories that embrace scenes of the larger setting rather than just covering battles.  Nice work!

This was a fun one.   I enjoyed the interactions between the two characters and it's left me wanting to know more about how the two came to be working together.  

The italics definitely pull their weight in seperating the inner story.  Wish I could've written more though of course!

I can't say I've read much White Dwarf stuff but I'm happy that it scratched that itch for you!

Funny enough the story-with-a-story was practically a byproduct of the  limited space!  I wanted to try out a framing device that gave a little more context to the story .  Thanks for the feedback!

To be honest, I'm not sure this fit the theme all that well, but I really enjoyed it nonetheless.  Kind of a Lovecraftian feel with  the final POV.  Good stuff.

Wow.   Loved this one.  Fun characterization  without shirking the grim nature of the setting.  I loved how  the "Close Enough" theme was so clearly going in one direction so the rug pull at the end was especially effective.  Also  Havoc Dwarves?  Hell yeah.

I quite liked this one.  Very concise writing that makes great use of the limited format.

As with past entries I try to avoid writing combat due to the constraints of the jam - but maybe that's something I need to challenge myself with for the next one.  I will admit that I had just watched Lord of the Rings for the fiftieth some time, so the dwarf/elf friendship was on my mind.  It's certainly not the most inspired of relationships.  I'm glad you enjoyed it for what it is though!

Really excellent descriptive work, and an inspired use of fonts to convey tone.  There's a spark in the writing here - a spark that I'll admit my own entry is lacking!  

I really liked the characterisation in this one, but I must say I kept waiting for some reveal as to why Julius was so madly driven with this plan.   I was thinking there was some sort of sinister force at play...

I'm glad you enjoyed it!  I think next writing jam I'll have to challenge myself more thematically, but yes I do try to give a reason to care for these characters.

Great characterisation, pacing, and graphic descriptions of the enemy.  Well done!

A lot of story packed into a tight space, and a fantastically clever ending.  Nice work!

Definitely one of the more ambitious stories as far as scope and lore implications.  Cool to see someone wanting to take things to that next level.

I personally avoid writing combat given the limit of 1000 words, but you've handled it incredibly well.  Nice work!

Excellent descriptions in this one, really embraces some of the best  aspects of fantasy writing.  I would happily read more of this.

I'm happy to hear you liked it!  I had a lot of fun creating the demeanor of Bernhardt.

I really liked the sort of ironic take on the theme.  Nicely done.

Glad you enjoyed!

I kinda felt like I was cheating by not doing the mood board but I felt this captured the feel in it's own way.  I'm glad to hear that people are picking up on that.

Clear, concise, and tightly written.  This was a fun read that I could totally visualize as a tabletop event.

Really cool parallels between the two leaders.  I didn't know who to root for!

Really nice prose to this one.  Quick and vivid descriptions that fit the setting nicely.

Thanks for the feedback!

Excellent.

Original and engrossing.  Very well done!

This is a well put together story, I always enjoy scenes in government offices when the rebellion/war/conflict reaches their door.  One thing I would suggest is to avoid similes that hinge around real life (hit like a semi truck) as it pulls me out of the world a little.

Fantastically clever use of the one page format!

Great little one shot scene, I want more now!

Nice one, I really like seeing the ogres presented in a more thoughtful, introspective light, not just lumbering brutes.

Cute story.   Having it told as a narration provided some good opportunities for humour, but I'm left wanting to know who it is narrating it!