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thanks! yeah. I'm happy with it as an experiment but in an ideal world I could have used fonts that were a little more legible/similar. I was kind of limited to whatever I could find in the google font options since I didn't think until just now that I could have easily set this up in indesign. whoops! 

Using the columns as micro chapters was a great idea. I think it actually helped the flow a lot. Lots of fun ways later scenes in this story could go sideways too. great job.

great setting and cute characters! I kind of wish the kid had lost an arm or something in the end to give it some punch, but that doesn't lower my score. 

Thanks!

 I knew a lot of people wouldn't catch it unless they read the description for them but he's actually an Eternal Warden, so those goblins are in for a big surprise when they find out what being honored at the temple means. (they're getting sacrificed to power their warden god) I like the idea that wardens don't think of this as a bad thing and don't understand it when the champions they bring home get upset.

Also goblins have an entire school of martial arts called boing-loing-kata that focuses on disabling opponents by targeting lower weak spots. It's one of the few combat disciplines that can hold their attention.

I refuse to apologize for my stories being comical. haha. Thanks so much.

Mrs. Frisby with a plasma rifle. 

Loving the cover image sketch! 

he meant he was going to make him reconsider some oaths. 

Thanks! I like to think all factions can be horrible in their own special way.

thanks so much! I was actually reading them all out loud in funny voices as I did my proofreading and invader zim isn't far off from the voice I was going for haha.

the rat-sized teapot is a great visual.

Great! Wish the ending had a little more punch, but that would have probably needed a few dozen more words to play with.

I'm liking this nasty odd couple a lot. A grody alliance. 

Dang. It sounds like the word limit was a challenge. I think it might've been worth sacrificing some of the setup exposition for more characterization and/or dialogue. Maybe next time! 

Could have used another pass or two to tighten up the writing, but I never expected to read a Sgt. Frog fanfic today so that was a surprise.

Some interesting worldbuilding. Could have used another draft or two for grammar/clarity. 

Solid opener to what feels like a larger story! I liked the rat.

Loved it. 

The elf-orc dynamic is a good idea, I would have liked to see more contrast and tension between the two though. They just seemed to politely get along.

 I love you managed to capture a kind of woodcut/textile visual aesthetic! THe beast noone has ever seen is my fav character.