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| Criteria | Rank | Score* | Raw Score |
| Flow & Clarity | #1 | 4.391 | 4.391 |
| Overall | #2 | 4.116 | 4.116 |
| Concepts & Originality | #7 | 4.130 | 4.130 |
| Adherence to Theme | #20 | 3.826 | 3.826 |
Ranked from 23 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.
Comments
Hell yeah fellow rat fan, definitely one of the favorites of the jam
(Jerma references are also a +2)
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Class WarfareI thoroughly enjoyed this one. Your descriptions were vivid, your prose was excellent (I loved "Kidding, of course. He'd laughed. I hadn't.") and I'm always here for a good rebel/underdog story. Big thumbs-up!
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Sisters-In-ArmsVery enjoyable, easy reading, and some subtle world building. Thanks for sharing!
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Their Imaginary FriendsUnfortunately, this didn’t seem to flow the greatest with the theme. I say unfortunately because I had such a great time that it hurts me to have to knock off a point or two for that.
Yeah, this was great. Loved the flow, and I’m always one for rooting for the underdog, so seeing a rat-person take on a battle brother is just my cup of tea.
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From ShadowI think I get where you're coming from, but imo this story satisfied the theme just fine. It may not be a typical "members of two different factions team up" kind of story, but I think the concept of the protagonist being saved through an unexpected encounter with someone who's there for an entirely different reason (looting the ship) should place the story well within the confines of the prompt.
We'll have to agree to disagree there, but I see where you're coming from.
To me, an allyship would involve active participation from both sides, but again, that's all within the purviews of your conundrum of philosophy.
It's still a solid story with great action and a thus-far greatly unique premise. I just can't give it full marks regarding how laid-out I feel the theme was and is.
Excellently written, this felt like a perfect snapshot of a larger world. I thoroughly enjoyed it.
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Beast and BoneMore ratty love! Whoever that space rat was, I hope they continue doing what they are doing. Would love to see them in a sequel where we learn their name.
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Bitter Rain - OPR Story Jam #9
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