Y a-t-il quelque chose de louche ici ? Le pastis sous-marin expliquerait cela.
ll me semble déjà être un jeu complet. J'apprécie les contraintes de ce système : les descriptions et les choix doivent être courts. Cependant, en permettant au joueur de se déplacer, ça ouvre beaucoup de possibilités pour l'interaction.
J'aime bien le concept, mais en tant que prototype, le jeu est très limité et actuellement le texte ne varie pas beaucoup. Si je peux proposer des recommandations :
- J'ai eu du mal à lire les choix en rouge. Je comprends que le rouge est la bonne couleur pour cette histoire, mais est-il possible d'augmenter le contraste du texte ?
- Envisageriez-vous d'ajouter un score supplémentaire : l'âge réel ? L'histoire se terminera toujours par la mort du joueur, soit aux mains de villageois en colère, soit de faim. Le véritable objectif, à mon avis, est de prolonger la vie autant que possible. Ainsi, un score de longévité indiquerait le succès du joueur.
J'ai trouvé le surréalisme et l'humour divertissants -- je devrais enquêter sur ce Boris Vian qui vous a inspiré. Au-delà de l'écriture, le design (typographie, musique, mise en page) m'a également impressionné. Bravo!
Apologies if commenting on your own work is poor etiquette, but a friend pointed out a play-through video that, for me at least, is at least as entertaining as the game itself (and has better graphics to boot). I'd still suggest that folks initially give the game a play, but if you get tired of clicking and would rather watch, this video gets through a sizable chunk of the game:
Sorry about the occasional typo -- this was a one off and written quickly without the usual beta-testing. I have made minor edits to fix some spelling issues in this online version.
Thanks. Everything I've written up until now has been parser IF; this was an experiment to see what Twine is like. It's a very different sort of writing experience. I'd now like to do something longer format in twine and work on integrating more of a puzzle component (but for the most part, I'm sticking with parser).
Any suggestions to improve legibility? For some small bits of the game (the file directory and ending), I used custom fonts, but body of the game, I went with the browser-supplied sans-serif font. I could easily switch it out to a defined font.
The best thing about these stories -- the pacing. I'm not sure if I played the game or if it played me. Every action that I took worked and moved the story ahead. It's a pleasure to just do what comes naturally and have it pay off so consistently. That, and the voice telling the frame story. Really enjoyed this.
Amazed at how much is packaged in this little gem. The writing style is a pleasure; it conveys a whole world beyond what we see in the scene. But it's also a fine game, not too complex, but given the constraints, well done and almost impossible to not replay obsessively.
