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this was really cool! ori was a sweetheart and i liked getting to know him!

this was such a treat to play!!! loved the concept of a fanfic-loving yandere and it was so cool how many different variations there were for the endings. i figured early on that the names were like, oh, ari is dehumanizing everyone by referring to them as their roles including their crush. and then i lost it when love turned out to literally be named love. i didn't think nerd would be ARI'S best friend instead of love's either lol. but yeah! had fun ending hunting and finding all the  combos of eliminate, befriend, love! thanks for making this game, i had a great time playing it!

also: the use of graphics to indicate sound effects or ari's plans was really cool and unique, and the main menu screen looking like ao3 made me laugh before i even opened the game. a lot of love was put into the presentation and art and writing and it shows! 

okay literally it's almost midnight on the last day of voting, i have not gotten far into the game but what i have seen is AMAZING.  like it's so pretty, from the main menu to the GUI to the art to the backgrounds. everything about this SCREAMS beauty  and passion and love and it's killing me that i don't have like 18  hours straight to play it.

thank you for submitting the game to the jam i'll definitely be looking at the rest  of it after i get some sleep

this was sooooo cute lovely and made me flashback to my own experiences in group clubs and visiting the library. also i  didn't realize at first that all of the books were like, real, so i did some very hasty googling and now have several books on my to-read list lmao. aside from that, it was fun seeing the different characters' approaches to their presentations and how their personalities are reflected in the things they focus on when talking about their books. it was also super cute how the mc and the chosen love interest calmed each other down before their own presentations. it was so relatable seeing kai pick books because they were pretty and i related too much to june getting down because she got rejected for  her phd. the relationship progression felt very natural and i loved reading it!!!

thank you for submitting your game to the jam!

thank you so much! i'm glad you liked the MC, i did my best to write her! 

i really loved this game!!!! the art is so lovely, i love mc's and bleuenn's relationship, and i also got attached to sarah. the character writing was very nice and i love how the characters can be both profound and silly  together. like the  food fight and race is so cute. my favourite part was when the mc was reluctant to get up because leaving means the day will end and the day ending means tomorrow will come and tomorrow means goodbye. that was just an excellent way of conveying that emotion. i also felt so nostalgic seeing the GUI because it felt similar to the tutorial in the ren'py documentation for customizing your GUI. 

anyways, all this to say thank you for submitting your game to this jam! i loved playing it!

I FORGOT TO MENTION I GASPED WHEN I REALIZED WHAT THE TITLE MEANT. LOVED THAT IT WAS ULTIMATELY REFERRING TO THE  TIME THEY SPEND TOGETHER

i  am SUCH a huge fan of this game already! like the art is beautiful, the writing is so strong, and  i love the game letting you be the stalker. i just really love the writing not just for how lovely the words are, but for how much sense they make. like reading the narration  about the mc's life i can absolutely see why they would be so  obsessed with something that gives them joy for once. what else do they even have at this point?

cannot wait to see how the story unfolds! thank you for submitting this game to the jam,  i'm lucky to have been able to play it!

wow, the demo was really interesting! i'm a huge fan of the art and the music and the backgrounds. were the  backgrounds drawn in that style or were they edited images?

also also! the writing was so charming! loved the funny narration and the silly mc, also, it's pretty unique to have a visual novel in third person, so that really stuck out to me as cool! i'm looking forward to getting to know myr  and the other characters in that really pretty banner on the game page. i'm a sucker for the darkened silhouette  +  stand-out colour art

i liked myr, that first impression really did leave a huge impact on me lmao. i'm super interested in the hints of backstory in the demo and seeing where the story goes from here!

thanks for submitting the  game to the jam!

i'm tempted to

congratulations on making a demo for your first game! i thought the art was super charming and i adore your use of lighting in the cgs! the paper and coloured pencil aesthetic made everything feel really unique, like a storybook! the UI was also very cute

i found taliyah very charming. i loved their sense of humour, love of hatsune miku, and how honest they are about their mental illness. 

i think the story was slightly weakened by anastasia's treatment, though. i kinda agree with her that it IS unfair that she's spent a week helping with rehearsals for a competition she's not even in. her one scene doesnt really establish that shes a bitch like everyone says she is, so everyone's treatment of her feels unwarranted?

anyways, i'm cheering for you and looking forward to where the game goes in the future! thank you for submitting this game to the jam!

ah crap i need to fix that later THANK YOU for bringing it to my attention!!!

glad you liked the concept and the character designs! it was very difficult not to make a joke about "potion/spell of trans your gender" in the script

THATS STILL IMPRESSIVE

ok i started a new save file to see if like, certain love interests had different reactions to an mc who chose a different drink but  i didn't think the dialogue changes would come in before you even chose a route. i need to ask

1. did you guys write every single scene over to go slightly differently if you had a different personality.
   1. oh my god that's so much work i can't tell if i'm in awe or terrified
   2. i am SO curious as to what the backend of this game look like

WHAT DO YOU MEAN THE COFFEE CUP IN THE TEXTBOX LEADS TO AN MC INFO PAGE OH MY GO D THATS SO COOL  HOW DID YOU DO THAT

literally even if i didn't play any other game just getting to play hot or iced would make me entering the jam worth it! but  also like i only realized after that insta-following u on socials and also leaving so many comments may be too intense i swear i'm normal i just liked it normal-style. also oh my god are those hearts in the chaiya florence finnick colours

hi, commenting here as well so everyone knows how great this game is!

i'm genuinely so amazed by every part of this game. the art is fantastic, the writing is charming, the characters are adorable, and also like, from a programming standpoint, there seems to be a LOT of different variables being tracked to ensure that the character conversations align with the way the player customized their character, which also makes for a lot of replay value! this is a game with a ton of heart put into it and i can't wait to see where it goes in the future!

thank god for save files....! <- guy  who took WAY  too long seeing all the different variations for telling everyone you're dating 

thank you! she's enjoying herself, haha! i'm glad i joined this jam, thank you for hosting it!

haha, glad it made you guys happy! i'm cheering for you guys, you've got a new fan! 

also need to mention. i am struggling so hard to choose a fave love interest. i'm biased towards chaiya because trading card nerd + fellow asian nonbinary, i adore florence's personality, but also. fennick is extremely pretty. you guys have made SUCH lovable characters!

hihi. i gotta say, i am a HUGE fan of what i saw so far!!! the artstyle is cute, i love the characters (absolutely LOST IT when chaiya scared that creep away with the weirdest acting) and the fake dating story is super interesting! i also gotta say, i GASPED when i realized that the chibis on the title screen also doubled as the cg gallery, that was so cute and also amazing, like, was that an imagemap or something else? also, you really nailed it with the music selections! they really suited the cozy modern feel of the story, and also, i really appreciated the background and coding work! like, sorry if this is weird to say, but i was so impressed by how precise the transition when paola and the mc sat down was, and the backgrounds were super pretty. felt remarkably touched when i saw the pride flag out in the open like that. 

i totally plan on playing more in the future! thank you for submitting this to the jam, i'm so lucky to have been able to play this!!!

this was lovely! i adored the beautiful art and the writing, it painted the most vivid picture of yearning and a love that's been halted by circumstance! the game was short but it totally hooked me into wanting to see more of these characters! even as the story is now, it's going to stick in my head! thanks for submitting it!

thank you, i'm glad you gave it a try! and i'm sure elliot would probably be happy to hear that!

just uploaded a new build, hopefully that should work and fix this issue!

thank you!

i adOred this game! the Black and white aeSthetic was supEr cool and it waS my firSt time seEing a Dev use a unique aspect ratio with renpy. in a Way it remInded me of Tamagotchi or a raising sim wHich fits with the manipulation and training in the storY. it was fun playing as an Obviously bad person doing obvioUsly bad things and i loved the freak for freak relationship.

my favourite end was the fire end i'm just a sucker for manipulative yanderes. 

the only thing i could complain about is that i don't like the use of the word sp*z in the true end. i know spastic is a word but using the version typically used as a slur was a choice? but yeah this was an amazing game!

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It's alright!

I haven't been able to update the document much lately, but I'm glad it was of use to you!

I didn't do this expecting compensation, so please don't worry about it! I think your story is good and I don't mind inconsistent updates on it, I'd just like to offer my help proofreading whenever you've got something done. If you're willing to let me, of course!

thank you so much for your feedback! means a lot! i'll get cracking on fixing those bugs soon!

thank you! that means a lot :)

take your time! the games arent going anywhere!

thank you! that's so kind of you to say, and i'm honoured that you loved the story so much and i hope you'll like my other works, if you decide to check them out!

WAIT YOU'RE THEPERSON WHO DID FALL OF THE ROSE PRINCESS HUH OH MY GOD I LOVED CHAPTER ONE OH THANKS FOR LOOKING AT MY GAME

all three! (don't worry about who the non-binary person is it's fine!)

thank you, you're so nice! it's an honour to hear that you liked songs and flowers enough to replay, and i'm glad you liked my newer games too! i'm currently working on another game in the same series, 3/4 spell swap, but i can promise you, the romance and friendship endings will continue there too!

i hope you have a nice day too!

i wish the game told you whether a skirt piece was for the back or  the front, i genuinely feel bad about messing up the niece's dress like this

on another note: loved the update! i was super impressed when i realized that the sewing you had to do changed in relation  to how many adjacent pieces you hadn't sewn yet. presented a fun trade-off of do you assemble the dress first to go faster but have more complicated sewing, or assemble it slower but have an easier time with the sewing! love the new character and i'm looking forward to seeing more of all of these women and of course, making more dresses!

I sent an email with my doc of the typos I've spotted so far. It's still a work in progress, so I'll be updating it as time goes on. If there's any issues with sharing a Google doc to a Yahoo account, please tell me so I can send you an alternate file.

And, just in case, let me say it here too: I'm willing to be your proofreader if you need a native English speaker. Even if you decide to pick someone else as your proofreader, I'll still send over the list of typos, because I want to help make your work the best it can be.

Again, thank you for your hard work! I can't wait to see where this story goes.

the reveal  of the cage and the tape was so well-done, i loved the combo of the music and expressions getting distorted with the mood! this was great and i loved it!

thank you! glad you liked it!

thank you! also crap i gotta fix that, thanks for bringing it to my attention!