Ooooh, that sounds nice, too! I don't mind a gradual reveal of the knowledge as long as it stays cohesive and you've seemed to have it figured out enough that I'm not too worried about YOU getting mixed up about which gemstone country you assigned which relationship status. xD Interesting to know about a map in the artbook though, this is noted for Christmas!
Thank you for answering, I don't mind waiting patiently to connect some dots. Hopefully the right ones in the end! xP
Is there a rough map or lore page to read about the different countries and governments and history they have? We learn about the Commander's personal relationships and some people and how they meet, but I'd love to have a bit more of an understanding on the overall situation. Is it something planned for later or included in the finished version?
such a wet little meow meow, when you strip away the bluster, so endearing, so cuddly... and for my reserved MC they are behaving so nicely and try not to be too scandalous in public.
Though I adore the friendship scenes I got with the rest of the cast as well and I'm so glad everyone is getting screen time (Ishra my shrewd dearest, Ezo you awkward darling etc). Especially that we get to support R and meet their family on the friendship route and it's not reserved for a romance. It makes it really feel like MC is finding connections and building their own home and household with all these people around them and not just the RO and their associated group. Is X going to be sour that R received a handmade gift first? (playfully, obviously) I just feel like R might brag to X to get a reaction maybe.
Also Yekbun is endearing in their own way, too, but rather than getting to know them, we mostly use them as a bridge reaching for the parents... while understandable, it feels a little one sided. Like including their own research or family in the conversation topics would be nice. After all it's been ages since they knew MCs parents and they probably changed as people, while on the run with MC, so I feel it's a bit awkward to put that on Yekbun any more than this. Or at least it felt a bit awkward to ask them if MCs parents would be proud, bc what are they supposed to say? Obviously, yes, besides all the other reservations about the situation. It's not like they can really say no, either. I guess, I just wish Yekbun and MC forged their own relationship instead of just being each other's link to the dead parents? Well, the future is long.
Yes, the rest of the chapter was awesome, too, but I want to have something to praise for when I get to play the other's routes, too and this is getting long... Thank you for writing and sharing, it's a consistently amazing story!
the author of the page probably does not get a message if you respond to me, so you should write a comment instead of replying! (also, don't get my hopes up that someone replied to me, please T_T) *waves at you in solidarity*
I'm away all day tomorrow so I'll have to wait till the night again anyway... I hope I can import my saves, though they are unlabeled and I kinda oopsed out on which path they belong to, but this is worth slowly savoring instead of rushing through anyway. I will not check any later at night than this, because I need to sleep and I will not if I see the update in front of me... temptation!!
it does help to transport you right back into the story, but it's true that it takes a lot of the excitement for the moment away if you've been mulling over it for months, so I actually agree with that assessment. BUT if it helps you keep writing, because you do not want it to leave hanging there that is a valid reason for the pacing, too. I know some writers motivate themselves like this.
there's a reason we don't date all of the NPCs. And Ash IS a sweetheart?? like literally he shares his ice cream, he rescues you from the streets? ALso, bad memory probably, but who is Lance and what did he do?
small report: in the new update after you wake up from your night with Ash, you meet Alfred in the living room and he tells you his son and Ash are outside sparring. when you look outside it says Ash and ALFRED are sparring, when it should be Gray.
I'm gonna drop random order comments as they pop out of my brain, so sorry if this gets rambly.
<spoilers for v5>
I had a suspicion when he got a name, but I'm glad we got to take in Enzo, he seemed so pathetic it was cute again! I also really like that Akhbar is not some power hungry evil brother, but Raruk legitimitaly isn't suited to lead and they generally get along very well. (Also, the kissing. The kissing was precious.) Next on the precious list is Alfred and our boy just.. falling asleep on his lap. I aww-ed, legitimately! And I think it's fitting that Gray gets to be first among the new husbandos, he earned it with watching over us while we had a nightmare and generally just being there and being helpful without having to be asked. (Second if we count Jack, I guess, though technically who knows if maybe there is someone else as well, so I'm counting without flashbacks for now.) I hope we get to help that mysterious adoptive brother who got corrupted down the line! And while I agree with calling Alfred daddy, including Gray in that made me laugh. Somehow I don't think he'd be offended though. Even if it lumps him together with HIS dad.
You've thought up some genuinely well rounded characters that aren't just hot tropes, but seem to have some actual character growth of their own going on.
Also. The sex scenes were all hot. Spark seemed a bit random and I laughed at the choice to heal him or 'heal' him. Sometimes, dear charas, your pick up lines are so bad, you gotta suffer being misunderstood on purpose. (and then I scrolled back and picked the other choice anyway, of course)
Only point of critique maybe.. the headmaster's sprite seems... squished? in comparison to the others. Maybe it's just the shorter arms? Or the head is too small compared to the massive body? I thought maybe he got squished to make him fit the screen and his proportions went off on accident. He does seem to be White's type and it's not too bad, but it felt more noticable compared to other's sprites. (And White looked TINY next to him, which is admittedly hot. Though he looks at least short with all of them.)
I was genuinely in awe how much you got done since the last update, all the kudos to you! Apart from the hotness, I think your writing is genuinely funny and the story and lore draw you in as well. Great job! Thank you for your efforts and for sharing them!
Oh yes, the flirt symbol. true it's a bit cutesy compared directly to the hexagon shapes, but maybe just putting the hearts in a hexagon rather than a circle would help with that. or adding like a pulse line, so there are some sharp corners. (personally I don't mind it too much, but after reading the before comment I find it valid and can't unsee it somehow)
the colors REALLY pop against the muted backgrounds and it makes reading a little bit more detached and a little easier on the eyes. it's totally Aya's purple, isn't it?! <3
As for the merch: finally I get to see Damon with a cat. And just as I suspected, it's having fun abusing him. xD Thanks for all your hard work! Good luck with the rest!
that chest is addictive and dangerous. we should get more opportunity to fondle it and smush our faces there. 👍🏼✨ Lovely game, I am completely smitten and my only complaint is that there isn't more time to be spent on it.
I just found this purely by a misclick accident, and it's a great discovery! The art is pretty, the story is intriguing and I love the main character being... kind of a mess? But a cute one. I kind of dig the dynamic between them and the king, but I do like DILFs, so no surprise. So far I played the hoe path of pretty much flirting and fu**ing my way around problems, but I'm really glad we get to pick up Snoof either way, bc omg that little one is cute!
Lovely game, I wish you all the strength to keep it up and look forward to what comes next!
The writing itself is perfectly fine, it's really just grammar and typos, in one or two cases word choice, so you can feel confident!
just one ex, prowess (this one was a repeat typo) with two s, it's easy to understand even with the missing s,it just reads smoother when corrected.
I'm looking forward to more in any case, polished or unpolished, it's a WIP right now so nobody expects perfection from the start. Wishing you patience and snacks!
Do you have a beta reader for the English? There's a bunch of just typos and basic grammar mistakes that I thought about sending in, but taking thousands of screenshots is a bit too much.
(Like if you have a word document or so as script, I'd offer, but documenting it all in screenshots etc is too much work for free)
it's a ring of appraisal and would be useful, but you never get to equip it and if you get it appraised in the mage guild you kinda.. never see it again. mostly take this route if you really feel fornicating with rats is icky I guess. same for the riddle reward. feels cool to be right and solve it and the ring has windcutter or something, but again, you never even get to equip it, and the mage appraiser never gets it back to you. (to be fair, not like he has much chance for that)
Hi, is there possibly a full screen option? I can't seem to get out of the mini screen. And welcome back to this cool story! I will read it even on tiny!
the old version with the heretic route has been deleted. this is the new story where the traits are the ones defining your path, not one obvious choice. it has not been as far along as the old one yet, because it's being rewritten. the fate of WIPs is being edited. Sorry.
https://www.tumblr.com/tricitymonsters/790087664731897856 this post has all the links for phone numbers and petitions you might like to sign or undertake. there's massive protest underway and fingers crossed, and breaths held. 🫵🏼✍🏼👍🏼🤞🏼🙏🏼
There are a couple little mistakes in the character descriptions, I do not know about the demo, but since these work as the front page for your advertising it might be good to go over them again. (like for the knight: hunting demonS (plural) and for Pomme: she always TRIES to see the best in people)
what's a vampire smut romance without werewolves!! XDDD this is the greatest thing ever and while I'm not big on fur, this is somehow intriguing! Sure, give me big fantasy wolf beast cuddles, too! Even better, let Valdricht have them, too!
this is old, but as a general hint: if you cannot open a rar file with winrar it's often bc it's too big. try 7zip and it will work even with bigger files like these ones.
After we've done our visit to my third grandma tomorrow and bought enough food to not need to go out till the new year again... I will just hibernate the first five days of 2015!!! Thanks for all the concerned comments, I'm just sleep deprived but fine otherwise! (Also I will probably try and read the new chapter at night and fall asleep in the middle as things are going, but I refuse to not even try! Gimme happiness or gimme sleep, I win either way!)
