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HELL YEAH! A FELLOW DARA MAIN! ﾟ+.ヽ(≧▽≦)ﾉ.+ﾟﾟﾟ

Lmao I'd hope so too. But I always have a save from the previous chapter and the one I have reads ch 13 (even thoighbits supposed to say ch 14). It's the ch where MC and the gang are at the mountains so I definitely am on the previous chapter and then when I continued onto the next chapter I was on chapter 15. 😅 I think the save files are mislabeled. I belive I recall being on chapter 13 and when I saved after moving onto ch 14, my save files still read as 13. I remember being extremely confused. TvT This could just be an issue where I need to reset my saves so don't worry too much about it, the story still functions perfectly fine!

Hello there! I love your characters and the stoy you have built so far! However I think ive noticed a minor error. Isnt this the ch 14 update? Because in the save logs the last chapter was recorded as ch 13. I could be wrong, im not sure but either way there is a consistency issue.

I see the new design on the game banner! It looks awsome! :)

I mean no offence but what happened to the old banner design? I feel like this new design doesn't look as great as the previous one. The colors also appear to look flat and boring because of the the blue hand on blue smoke and the red hand on red smoke. I also noticed that it's hard to see the last symbol on either ends of the mesh of symbols in the middle of the design. The red one doesn't show against the red smoke and the blue one is too bright and doesn't show on the white smoke. I quite liked the elements of gold, purple, blue and red in the old banner, the colors complimented each other nicely and it was more visually interesting to look at. Just curious, but was there a specific reason for the change or did you simply want to make a new banner? 

PS: This is just my opinion, I am not a graphic designer. Plz take it with a grain of salt. :)

I totally get what you mean! There are sometimes so many, but so few words in the English language. Try using a thesaurus to see if you can find a word that has a closer definition or keep it as is. Its your book, and I still love it regardless! :)

Critiques aside (Ch 4 Spoilers)

FUCK YOU ATHIEL YOU COCKY SON OF A BITCH WITH YOUR GREATER THAN THOU ATTITUTE.  ELIAS DESERVES BETTER THAN YOU FOR A SIBLING! POOR MAN PROBABLY HAS AMNESIA AND YOU ALLOW JULIET TO BRAINWASH HIM INTO HATING MC! (speculation)

So.....blinking? 😅 (pls dont take this offensively I am just genuinely asking). You could've meant winking with one eye each or forcefully blinking, and if it was the latter something like, "They glanced at the twins,  blinking deliberately." to emphasize the intentional movement as shown in the picture above instead of passively blinking. But I am not a writer so please take this criticism with a grain of salt!

Was this a deliberate writing choice?

I'm crine. You mean blinking? 😭

No worries! Please take your time! I hope youre able to get back into it soon.

OMFG LUNAN I CANNOT EMPHASIZE ENOUGH HOW MUCH I LOVE YOUR WRITING! ALL THE FORESHADOWING AND PLOT TWISTS THAT HAVE BEEN REVEALED GOT ME CACKLING IN DELIGHT.  I love this story so much and you've certainly outdone yourself both in terms of the story, pacing and writing. I found very few errors, only about 3 which is very impressive! I hope you continue to work on this story not just for our sakes but  for your own enjoyment as well! I look forward to the next chapter!

 ﾟ+.ヽ(≧▽≦)ﾉ.+ﾟ

Yw! :)

Hint

It says that theyre all connected but the pastword is only one full date.

I got that too! But that only happens when you dont enter your last name and only enter the first name. Atleast thats what fixed it for me.

Ive seen you comment on other IFs you have great tastes :)

ok my contenders are Lab Rats, Lost to Time and Moonlight Protocol. Lab Rats and Lost to time remind me of another IF that I love called Sea of Stars it's peak trust and so are the authors other works 🙏. For Moonlight protocol I like the concept of having an Android MC and so far I haven't seen any other IF that was available on my device have this concept. If I had to rank all 5 it would look like this:

1. Lab Rats

2. Moonlight Protocol

3. Lost to Time

4. Daddy was a Killer

5. The Howl

No seriously, I loved this chapter and I cant wait for my MC and Tellus to bond so she can heal him from his trauma. 😭💔 (I love a good angsty love story, lol.)

"FAWN AND BISON ARE HAPPILY MARRIED WITH FOUR CHILDREN NAMED LEOPARD, JACKAL, HYENA AND LYNX, WITH ANOTHER ON THE WAY!" I scream as I'm being dragged away into a mental asylum.

WE HAVE TO HOLD THEM IN OUR MEMORIES! 😭🕊

(Spoilers)

*Gets a notification that Cantata has updated*

Me: "Oh, I'm so excited ! I can't wait for my female MC to romance Tellus-"

Save me a dance?

They're still all yours, Vinea.

ASKSFGLKLKFSTFG

ALSO, DONT THINK I FORGOT ABOUT YOU DISFIGURING OUR PARENTS! I SWEAR TO GOD THIS BETTER NOT BE BISON AND FAWN ALL OVER AGAIN! 

(　ＴДＴ)(　ＴДＴ)

Haha, your welcome! And I definitely will! 🫶

I love your writing, pls dont go bald! 👏✨️😍

Btw, I also have a cat named Cherry! :D

Ah, the good old days...🥲

Well, this aged poorly 💀

Just curious, but where can I find a twine template like this?

I do think it would be interesting to keep the beginning as it so that we, the readers can see your writing develop as we continue along the story, or tweak it when the story is finished if you want your writing to seem more even throughout. I hope you are able to finish making this story and be proud of what you created regardless of your choice. That being said this is one of my favorite IFs ever, and I love your writing style! <3 If I ever end up making an IF, just know that you were and inspiration!

 (^-^)/

Yaaaaaaaay! ( ≧∀≦) This was such a nice surprise! You're one of my favorite authors and I love your sense of humor! <3 Thank you for this gift!

Just wondering in the high romance for D

(Spoilers)

Do we get to kiss D or does the relationship stay relatively the same to the chapter before. I'm unsure if I'm on D's high route and if I'm not I would like to replay the game to see if I can get it.

Okay, I haven't caught on the last few updates (Spoiler)

I've only caught up to the part where Erik stabs Alberich's eye (which is WILD for like a teen) but I am wondering, is it possible for Linnet to get together with Sieghardt if MC doesnt romance her because I'm high key rooting for them! ( ≧∀≦) 

Happy to help! ^^

Wow, that was quick. Thanks! :D

Quick question, when do you get to select your height? Currently in my profile it says that I set my character's height to "very tall" when I never saw the cycle option to choose a height. 😅 I kept going back to double check but maybe this is just a glitched...?

No problem! ^^

Uh for some reason whenever I try to set my character gender to female an error always pops up. :(

And then for some reason, later on when mentioning my character only some of the female pronouns show up. In this one the word "sister" is supposed to be after "My". Idk if anyone else is having this issue. ToT

I dont think all the chapters are actually here. (Spoilers)

I'm currently at the part where MC is saved from the shadow creature by her parents and than it cuts to the end of the demo with options like, "play again". Is this just me or is this a bug.

Im having the same problem

This was such a treat! Thank you for making this game :>

An isekai IF?! Sign me up!