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Was this a deliberate writing choice?

I'm crine. You mean blinking? 😭

Weird phrasing, maybe? I meant this:

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So.....blinking? 😅 (pls dont take this offensively I am just genuinely asking). You could've meant winking with one eye each or forcefully blinking, and if it was the latter something like, "They glanced at the twins,  blinking deliberately." to emphasize the intentional movement as shown in the picture above instead of passively blinking. But I am not a writer so please take this criticism with a grain of salt!

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Critiques aside (Ch 4 Spoilers)










FUCK YOU ATHIEL YOU COCKY SON OF A BITCH WITH YOUR GREATER THAN THOU ATTITUTE.  ELIAS DESERVES BETTER THAN YOU FOR A SIBLING! POOR MAN PROBABLY HAS AMNESIA AND YOU ALLOW JULIET TO BRAINWASH HIM INTO HATING MC! (speculation)

Please, dw, I'm not taking this the wrong way, hahaha. Maybe a two-eyed wink? Double wink? I feel like changing to 'blinking' loses that vibe 'wink' has...

I totally get what you mean! There are sometimes so many, but so few words in the English language. Try using a thesaurus to see if you can find a word that has a closer definition or keep it as is. Its your book, and I still love it regardless! :)