Played this through some today. A few thoughts.
-Has a Persona like vibe to it, and I liked those games.
-Character interaction is well done.
-Nice magic system.
Cons/Suggestions for Improvement:
-Need to fix the grammar and spelling. I was able to get the general idea of what is going on from the game, but there were many errors. For starters, your title for Chapter 1 is not spelled right. Maybe run all dialogues through Microsoft word? That would catch about 99% of the spelling errors.
-At the power plant, why did nothing happen if I tried to go off the main path? Maybe at least put a dialogue there or something to say why I can't wander off.
-Why does the Ogre give the same EXP as 2 bats? This makes EXP rewards feel very disproportionate to the difficulty of the fight. I'd consider letting the Ogre give you 35 - 50 EXP for that first fight. Sure, it would put you close to level 2 (or over), but the rest can be balanced around that.
Score: 2/5. Meh. What there was, was too short to get a feel for the game or if I'd like it further, and with the errors I'm not 100% sure what the story was. Fix that up and/or add about another 15 minutes of content so I can get a better feel for the story and that could easily improve to a 3/5 or higher.