I welcome any sort of input that helps me improve, so don't worry. And yes, I need to go through the entire script and clean it up a bit. If you find any line of text that's awfully wrong, you can always press "S" in your keyboard to screenshot it and send it to me. I'll fix it.
Well I really only have the twins and the gamer girl left so I'll have to do another playthrough of the game at some point to get screenshots.
On another note, I really like the other perspective feature it's fun seeing the side stories from the girls' perspectives. I kind of wish there were more of them.