Hello again! I just finished Shuu's route and got his best ending. He's such a cute and quirky guy! (My Quirky Little Pony. /shot) His deadpan face is just hilarious. Correct me if I'm wrong, but I couldn't help but wonder: did you take inspiration from Junjou Romantica for Shuu's character? Bc his wealth, his early beginnings with writing, his possessiveness, and his excitability over rather ordinary things like riding trains seem rather similar to Usagi-san--granted a much lighter take on it. Not really complaining, but just curious as to your inspiration. ^w^
As usual (though you might be tired of this already), here are some notes I have on the route: [SPOILER WARNING]
(1) If you get sick before he does, he still says the "you took care of me when I was sick once" line.
(2) The text keeps saying "respond" instead of "response" in Shuu's route; idk if it's the same with the others. Also the grammar by the Christmas scene, I believe, was quite messy.
(3) During the amusement park scene, Haato says "fine, I'll just buy you the M size like always" while buying the Magical Ponpon shirt. By "always", is Haato referring to his own shirt size or is that a typo? Because Shuu's a size XL yet the M-sized shirt somehow fits him well. (Also: "He immediately puts the headband on his face." That line was funny, but I believe that's a typo, too.)
(4) There are two instances that I've seen in his route that, despite being already done with the day, the day repeats itself as if a completely separate day--if that makes sense. The first is after the scene in the bookstore when Shuu finds out that he's actually just "love sick" and the other one is after the planetarium date.
Thank you again! Sorry for the long-winded post. uwu