The fact the you seem doomed to die is an interesting touch. It adds depth to your story, which is hard to do in 200 words! I also love the line "Failure is not an option". It also implies more backstory, therefore depth. Well done :)
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Thanks Between2! Originally this was going to be a "Yes/Yes, But/No" dice pool action system but I discovered I didn't have enough words to elaborate on a satisfying No mechanic! So now it's just Yesses and Yes, Buts until you die, which I hope contributes to a very powerful Last Stand sort of feeling.