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ThatPenguinHoe3 years ago (18 edits) (+2)

(I'm probably going to add onto this comment as I play through.)

Just opened the game; love the title screen. Just one little problem: the black text in the Options menu is extremely hard to see unless you hover over it and illuminate it.

Also, don't take this the wrong way, but would you be looking for a text editor, by any chance? I would love to help spruce up the grammar, if you're interested.

Five minutes in, just got to the flashback - I'm absolutely loving this. I have a creative imagination and it's running wild right now.

Huh. First time I've seen my name in a visual novel.

Gotta say, Bal took his time before he started fighting the horde. He probably could have prevented a lot more deaths if he'd acted instead of talking.

Not a fan of the face of the dead woman. The stomach and baby were mediocre, but the face was a bit much.

Oh, wow, you're really just gonna throw a nude changing scene in there. Ok, works for me, I guess. But he THICC, for real.

AgentWolf(ÒwÓ)3 years ago (1 edit)

Reply to the first paragraph; YES! Someone has finally pointed that out! You see, I'm very well aware of every flaw my game has in it. And those text colour is one of them. I'm not great at designing so if you don't mind, could you please tell me which colour is good for the texts and another colour for when you hover the cursor on the text while complementing the blue colours on the bg? (QwQ)

Reply to the second paragraph; Nah it's fine. I understand what you mean. Like I said in the previous comment, I'm a self learner in English so ig that's why my English is a bit wacky. But I'm currently still living in my parent's house and still studying in college. Plus my parents don't let me have a job cuz of the Covid. Therefore, I don't have any money to hire anyone to edit my game regarding the texts. Moreover, I just consider creating my VN only as a hobby so it'll be a lot of investment for me to spend money on them when I just think of it as a hobby. And I don't really expect you to offer me your editing skills for free now, do you? ('>TwT)>

Reply to the third paragraph; Thank you! I'm glad that you enjoyed my story! \(>w<)/ Everyone loves a flashback in VNs when there's always a little element of suspense and mystery engraved at the end of it. (>w>)

Reply to the fourth paragraph; I already got an idea of what your name is XDXD

Reply to the fifth paragraph; ~~Erk! That's probably my fault ('ÚwÙ)~~

Reply to the sixth paragraph; I'm more of a graphic person. "If you can't tell them, then you need to show them instead! (ÒwÓ)"

Reply to the seventh paragraph; Do you know how many times I'd fantasize about the mc(my only oc and fursona) after I started my novel long ago? Now is the perfect chance to do it! (ÙvÚ) ~~and I love my man being thicc as well lmao~~

ThatPenguinHoe3 years ago (7 edits)

As far as coloring goes, I might suggest you continue with the idea of black outlined in neon blue. However, when an option is selected, it should just be red and shouldn't have the neon blue anymore. The same could be said for the existing neon words - if you select it, it should lose it's neon color. Because if I choose the Options tab, I can't immediately tell that it's been turned red.

In response to lending my editing skills, doing it for free is exactly what I was thinking. I write stories in my spare time in Google Docs anyways, and I would love to make grammatical edits to such a good VN for free.

However, I wouldn't want to look through raw code to find the text. If it was in a separate document, then I'd be ok with it. But separating text from code is kind of half of the work anyways, so I can understand if that's not something you're willing to put effort into.

And my name? I'm always surprised when a movie/tv show character has it because it's a biblical name, so most people don't care for it in media. But I'm even more surprised to find it in a VN. Especially a gay furry VN.

AgentWolf(ÒwÓ)3 years ago (1 edit)

Bruh that's how I did it in ma first build. Exactly like how you imagine it and left it in the first two builds XDXD... But then when I looked at it I thought it was too messy and changed to how it is now. But if you think those colours are better then it shall be done. (>wO)/

Really?... Like REALLY?! ARE YOU SERIOUS?!! Dude that'll be great! Thank you so much for your help bradah! (>QvQ)> As for the text, don't worry cuz I already have them ready separated in another file! (O3O)👌🏻

About your name; I FUKKEN KNEW IT! XDXD

ThatPenguinHoe3 years ago (4 edits)

Maybe tone down the line width by about 25%, if you can? Because I see what you mean by "too cluttered." Somewhat thinner lines should at least help, if not solve the problem. But since it's only the Options page, the categories of the Help page, the numbers on the save/load page, and the Yes/No selection when you load a save, it shouldn't be too bad.

At the very least, adding it to the Yes/No selection should happen. You cannot see anything on that window.

The color is not necessarily the best option, but it's better than its current state.

And yes, I would love to get started whenever you have the chance to send it to me. You can email me at njohnson4551@gmail.com (Now you know my full name, lol) and I'll take it from there. Make sure the Subject line of the email is something outrageous because I have a lot of college recruiters emailing me and I might see your email, think it's from a recruiter, and ignore it until Saturday. But if the Subject line is something like "I know where you live," or "Brought to you by Horny Furries International," then I'll know it's from you.

Alternatively, I'm NotSoSecretGay#1807 on Discord.

AgentWolf(ÒwÓ)3 years ago

Yo! Very sorry for the late reply! Been busy editing the game, here and there, this and that, you know what I mean? ('ÚwÙ)

About the colours, yes I've done it and honestly....they looked better than the last time I remembered (ÓwÓ) So it means the colour text problem is solved! (>wO)/

About those files, I'll send them to you later cuz the ones I have rn are all created for a normal novel, so I need a little more time to edit them hence it'll be more fun to read as a VN. Are you okay, with that? Or do you just want me to give you as to how it is? (OwO)

FYI, about a few hours ago I made an official channel of my own on Discord related to ODYSSEY and after I've taken some rest for the whole day, I'll update a DevLog attached with an invitation link to the said channel later. So be ready dude! (/>3<)/

ThatPenguinHoe3 years ago (1 edit)

It’s all good. I’ve been in a lab and three classes for the last eight hours.

Glad to hear the colors worked out, I was a bit uncertain.

If you want to format the text differently, I don’t have any complaints. I would however like a plain copy of the text as I will most likely make a lot of the edits while on my phone, and I can convert the plain text to a Google Document for my ease of access.

When it comes to Discord, I have a tendency to mute hyperactive channels to avoid notif spam. If it’s a somewhat private channel, I’ll leave it unmuted, or you can just @ me and I’ll eventually get the notif.

AgentWolf(ÒwÓ)3 years ago

WAKATTA! (>3O)7✨

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ThatPenguinHoe3 years ago

When are you planning on sharing the file with me? I'm eager to start editing.

AgentWolf(ÒwÓ)3 years ago

Ara ara~ Be patient ma dude. (>w>) The work is almost done and I think I kinda got too excited with the story as this is the longest chapter I've ever done yet.

Perhaps I'll be done by the day after tomorrow? My sis brought my laptop to her workplace every morning so the process is kinda slow but surely the last part is almost done. Just hang on for a little longer, aight? (>wO)/👌🏻✨

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