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I'm really enjoying the story so far, and most of the characters are fleshed out and fun. My only real issue is the unbelievably bad English.

I really mean no disrespect, especially if English is not the writers first language, and I understand that grammatical and spelling issues is part of a ongoing project like this, but it ranges from bad to actually unreadable.

I would use the corrections form to report it, however, it's literally in every scene. It honestly reads like it's been translated through something like Google Translate.

If English is your target market, I would really recommend having your script proofread and edited.

strongerbonds2 years ago (2 edits) (+3)

Hello! Thanks for your recommendations! My apologies for the bad English. I have been trying to get some help in that area but it is hard because I don't want to ask friends to proofread for free every month and the project right now is not making the enough profits to be able to pay someone to do that job. And there is another issue I prefer not to mention here that makes me have more errors when writing and it is hard to notice them. I'm always trying to find ways to solve this issue.

I'm glad you are liking the story! ^_^

fuzen112 years ago

I would recommend instead of using the questionnaire to have a Google docs that patrons or everyone can edit, and you let them post all the typos there. Then everyone can see what has been suggested yet, and you have many people correcting each a few things.

I think that would help. And you can create a new page per chapter on the Google doc to make it even more accessible.

I know the English you use has issues, but you can still get the emotions across exceptionally well, so congrats to that already!

WolfBearHybrid2 years ago (1 edit)

tbh i don't find it that bad... english is not my first language too, but I can't find that much problems it most of the writting... maybe a few typos here and there...

btw what language is your main one?

Benjamin2 years ago (2 edits) (+1)(-1)

Do you think script proofread and edit jobs are cheap? A small indie game like this will not have enough fund to afford that kind of services tbh. "from bad to actually unreadable" isnt just over the top? I have seen worse.

Charmerjoey2 years ago(-2)

i don't think the english/grammar is that bad anyways, if it was so bad i'd prolly have just stopped playing, ya know?

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