Thank you for your feedback! You're right about the continuity error - that's exactly where the route split and I wrote it like a year later, haha. I changed around a few sentences and fixed it :)
I'm definitely in need of a beta reader whose native language is English, since several people have said the grammar is off here and there.
Ah, I see, that makes sense. Writing breaks--they'll get you. Like the boogeyman. Glad you fixed it though!
If you aren't sick of me and would be open to it, I would be happy to be one of the beta readers. I'm a big reader/writer, and I also work with a small (tiny but functioning really) publishing company as one of the editors, so I'm not exactly unfamiliar with the craft. Or, you know, pick someone you actually know because maybe this is just really weird :p
