Okay, I'm already done with the new demo, so commenting as promised!
SPOILERS AHEAD, mainly for people who aren't the devs and didn't play the previous version!
So, first off, I must say I really enjoyed the writing now. Even if I'm not the best judge as english isn't my language, I still can see it's a lot better now. The new characters' sprites are also gorgeous, and the overall thing is just glorious. I'm really thrilled about the full version of this!
Now about the newcomers among the romanceable characters. Ellis is such a lovely character. He's very interesting, and it's really nice that he actually doesn't want to marry - he goes really well with the rest of the cast, since each one of them has really different motivations and ambitions. I also can't wait to learn more about his brothers and all the mess about them. And Nicholl... well, Nicholl is still my favorite, so I can't even express how overjoyed I am with his route, even if it's only the beginning. I was wondering about where would this route go, since he's not one of the suitors per se, and I love it so far, it's so intriguing! And since now he and Charming have a lot more interractions than before, I love their relationship even more.
And now, as you may have expected, I need to talk about Mer, of course, as usual, yeah I'm obsessed, yada yada XD - aaanyway! Yeah, I can see the improvement on the writing here, and my worries are eased so far - it was so great and I'm incredibly excited about it. I also really really like how the talk about the body exchange goes at the beginning - when Nicholl wants to trade bodies with Charming. The flow of this conversation is great. I must admit I don't recall if this conversation was in there in the old version, and I'm too lazy to check it out right now, but if it was, obviously it wasn't as impacting as now. Knowing the truth about Mer and what happens at the end of the route, even if it may have been altered a bit for the new version, I think you really did a great job writing that scene.
I'm really curious if he'll stay my favorite route in this new version or if I'll like Nicholl's route more, as I like him more as a character. We'll see when you'll be done with the full release I guess! Can't wait for it!
Thank you for the great expansion! Good work and good luck with finishing the project!