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The grammar was absolutely atrocious. I spent almost literally every second of the game rereading and trying to make sure I interpreted everything correctly ontop of mentally correcting typos and repeated spelling errors... Was Crystal purposefully spelled with an 'i'?

That being said the game was sweet, the story was lovely and interesting and the characters were wonderful. I can never choose between Casimir and Xander I just... Always feel heartbroken no matter which way I go. The main story was a touch predictable but there were a bunch of little pieces that fit together nicely. It reminded me alot of many other stories that I enjoyed without outright copying the plot and I enjoyed it more than I initially expected.

The art was nice, a bit cartoony and rough but very endearing. I enjoyed the game over all but it was admittedly a bit too much work to read for me. Having to rearrange sentences in my head so that I could make sense of the writing was a bit of a chore so I doubt I'd really replay it but it was a very nice story and I'm glad I continued reading until the end.

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"The grammar was absolutely atrocious." - Since you're a self-proclaimed "super grammar nazi" I can only imagine the horror you had to face while playing my game:) I actually have someone helping me fix all those grammar mistakes (because English isn't my native language), so the next version of my game shouldn't be so painful for people like you :)

"It reminded me alot of many other stories" - Really? Which ones? I'm curious.

I did assume that English wasn't your native language, considering that I it is still very good. I just personally have a lot of trouble focusing on the story when I'm mentally correcting it all in my head. It's not your fault at all but it is definitely something that affects my ability to enjoy the story.  I'm glad you're not taking offense to it and I'm really happy to hear that you're still working to improve it even though it is probably a small matter for most people.
The other stories would be Dragon Age obviously with the mage tower thing, the bindings and the secret mage ritual. You put your own spin on it and it was different enough that it remained interesting. Also one of your companions turning out to be a prince. =P Then also Amnesia(just very vaguely but it made me think of this when I initially learned she'd lost her memory), with the memory loss and not being able to remember the person she had been with for the past years of her life.  Which the circumstances were very different and no one was dying and she didn't have a spirit in her head or anything so less so that story. Xander was also very different from Ukyo so I'm not sure why it reminded me of that at all. But I think the main thing it reminded me of regarding the memory loss is SoulSet. Arantis even reminded me a bit of Marco. As I said the similarities aren't such that they take away from your story in the least.

Thanks! "SoulSet" and "Amnesia" are two games I haven't played yet, but I guess now I will have to.  :)

Soulset is really weird and... I mean I loved the story but some parts of it were strange and Idk if it's for everyone. xD but yeah they were both pretty interesting. Especially if you like stories with a twist. =]