Hi, creator of the twine here!
Well for not having anything to say about it, what feedback you gave is appreciated!
I wasn't actually sure how to approach the formatting so I'm sorry to hear it didn't work in the end. This is actually (and probably obviously) one of my first serious-ish twine attempts so more than anything a lot of it was learning experience. I also left the story fairly vague cause of the word count restriction. I also really wanted to focus on seeing where I could go aestetically, since a lot of twine's use the default theme and I wanted to avoid doing that if possible. So I'm glad to hear you like the style :)
Ofcourse none of this is to absolve your critique and next time I make one hopefully it will be an experience more enjoyable :) Thank you!
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