p27 Which Character suffers and dies because your actions? should be Which Character suffers and dies because of your actions?
p28 What peril do they pull down upon you? should be What peril do they bring down upon you?
p29 You are exposed as a monster and flee to a far off land should technically be flee to a far-off land
p33 not really a correction but - "You know where the old things are" seems like a confusing prompt to me
p36 a fever dream spun of cobwebs should be a fevered dream spun of cobwebs
p38 Your whole being becomes centered in your senses and your hungers should be
Your whole being becomes centered on your senses and your hungers. (Also technically hungers should probably be hunger unless this was a conscious choice.)
p42 You remain ageless as your friends slowly curl and dry up; - I found this confusing. I figure it's a creative way of showing that these friends are aging but I think it's a bit of a strange way of expressing it
p43 "That Resource once belonged to another Character, but you had forgotten" - to be grammatically correct forget needs an object. So it should be something more like - "but you have forgotten this" or "..., a fact you had forgotten"