p85 These new vulnerabilities prove a key to learning about your nature - I think it's these new vulnerabilities prove key to learning about your nature
p85 A wrong you've long mulled you now forgive. - I think it should be mulled over - you mull wine but mull over an idea
p85 prompt 21 the graphic is almost covering the word 'dead'
p86 Rage as you watch your hard work turned the benefit of others - should be turn to the benefit of others
p86 A poet enraptures you with their art. You manipulate him and inadvertently crush their spirit, their poems are dead. - the pronouns are inconsistent - it should be ' you manipulate them' instead of him.
p87 - Snatch up those who wander in darkness. - in my mind it should be wander in the darkness because it's not a metaphorical darkness but the specific darkness beyond the fire light, but I might've misunderstood what you meant here :)
p87 - It is awkward, at the least - should be It is awkward, in the least. - These are from the collins dictionary -
- You can use in the least to emphasize a negative - which I think is the case here
- You can use at the least to signify at the very lowest figure or amount; with no less - so for example "stay ten days at the least"
p87 - Check a Skill and to fail to put them on the proper path. - I'm not sure what you mean here, Tim?
p88 - You’ve lost focused and everything burns. should be You’ve lost focus and everything burns. (Also probably not very important but the graphic is covering the page number)