p85 These new vulnerabilities prove a key to learning about your nature - I think it's these new vulnerabilities prove key to learning about your nature
OMG I WRITE SO POORLY IT BURNS! IN MY THRASHING YOU SHALL BE AWARDED A PRIZE
p86 Rage as you watch your hard work turned the benefit of others - should be turn to the benefit of others AND p87 - Check a Skill and to fail to put them on the proper path. - I'm not sure what you mean here, Tim?
NO PRIZE! CHARTINBOY TURNED IN THE SAME ERRORS BEFORE YOU. YOU GET ALL HONORS BUT NO MONEY FOR THIS.
p88 - You’ve lost focused and everything burns. should be You’ve lost focus and everything burns. (Also probably not very important but the graphic is covering the page number)
A PRIZE FOR THIS! IT IS A PURE EXAMPLE OF A SHAMEFUL ERROR AND FOR IT I SHALL DON A HAIRSHIRT.
(your other edit suggestions are excellent)