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Having experienced your work before I might remark that it goes without saying the art and presentation is top notch. There's really no arguing that this isn't pretty to look at, harmonious in the layout, and also has that intrigue factor on seeing the NPC portraits, among other cover elements. 

The hook is super evocative and reminded me of an HBO intro or "last time, on" section of a show. 

The story itself is quite dense and as a Guide I'd expect to prepare this pamphlet well ahead of time and be sure I understood all the moving parts. There's a lot of meat on the bone especially for big roleplayers. I could easily see this fueling a session per act at least. 

The only thing I feel is worthy of mention for critique here is that the interior page, the amount of text, and the (mostly) monochrome presentation is a little fatiguing to read. Your red spot color might be nice for some of your bolds, maybe a drop shadow on text or  something to pull the body away from the background. It's a minor issue if anything.

I believe I see some basic spelling errors to clean up for a full release but that would be to nitpick.

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Thanks for the kind words. I'm super pleased with how it all turned out.

The first line of the hook was actually one of the first thing that came to me. I knew that if it were in the second person as well, it would cause the players to lock in and think, "wait, what? I was just thrown off a cliff???". at that point, the details of the hook could dig in more to their minds as there's a lot of allusion to things that could help them along the way.

Agreed, this is meant to be more of a small arc than a one shot, and you are right on how the acts are structured. Each one has its own beats and provides a nice climax to get you through to the next session.

I took your advice, and found an interesting way to use color and text to help visually break up the interior page a little more, and also provide some visual queues for the Guide to understand links throughout, where certain saves would be necessary, etc. This was a great piece of critique. Thanks.

Finally, you're right on there being a few misspelled words. Those have been fixed and will be released in a new version post judging.

Cheers!

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Pleased to have been any help at all. This is a great entry and it deserves to sing!