I really enjoyed the direction you chose with the theme!
My only suggestion would be that some of the dialogue feels a bit repetitive; the style and subtle glitches do a lot already to explain what is going on. And I understood what was going on without really having to reread anything.
(In my opinion, that is good since that means the art style and concept are consistent)
The relationship dialogue between the two characters, particularly. Mimi already comes off as very controlling, and the relationship isn't healthy. I felt after the first day, I was wondering more about what Mimi was thinking internally, rather than what Domo had to say/her calling Mimi repeatedly.
I feel for a game this short, internal character struggle rather than external may help the story land for more people.
Mind you, I am not familiar with game jams yet, and I have only done long-term projects, so please take my recommendations with a grain of salt!
hmm to be fair since everything domo is saying is from mimi's thoughts i guess that's a window in? i think the point is also that mimi should present as narcissistic (but you don't realize that until later) and basically says whatever she thinks. i sometimes like wondering what a character's thinking instead of knowing it, but i also find writing internal character struggle tougher since what i write feels more cringe to me sometimes :P
and yeah, the whole story & writing (6000+ words) was done in 72 hours, mostly by nii (who did all the art except minigame stuff) and myself (who did the rest of the art + almost all the programming) so :') many places we could've refined but i think it was pretty good for the time limit. lots of kudos to you though, i tend to lose motivation for longer projects haha
