Wow! The story is crazy good! A typical German guy saying his English is not good and then writing an excellent story with high-level vocabulary :) The music and aesthetics - everything is in harmony.
It would also be cool to add more visuals — some occasional art of what the hero sees, how someone looks, etc. Some interactivity would also be a nice spice for a text game! And maybe some sound effects to add depth to the events described in the text.
I would love to play the full release.
P.S. Please add an option to select German — I'm curious if I'm still able to read it :D