I love the interaction between day and night versions of the world and the concept of the star time travelling to feed itself. Crazy! I think the design and art are great.
Some questions and feedback:
- Is this pamphlet supposed to be a z-fold? I ask because the Landing Area stretches across what would be the back of the pamphlet to the second panel of the pamphlet if it was roll folded.
- I understand the stylistic reason, but when I saw the front panel I immediately thought I had misread and the module was titled "Like Day." That said, it is a cool conceit.
- The minimaps alongside area descriptions are a great idea, but I had trouble reading them.
- Depending on how this is intended to be read, this may be moot: I am assuming the far left panel of the first page was the second one that would be read. If that's the case, the first time I see the Relic mentioned is when discussing how the observatory shapes the effects of it, but I don't know what it is yet.
- I won't talk much about the complexity, since I see others have. I do think some of it could be solved with some rearrangement of information, again depending on how it's meant to be read. For example, I didn't understand why building a dam would accelerate the cycle. Maybe adding a "(see Power Station & Factory)" would help?
- I'd also like to know the relationship between the fruit and rifts. Do the fruit emit energy that repels the rifts?
This is so dense with creative ideas. It sounds like you're planning to flesh it out, so I'm excited to see where it goes.