Well conceived, well-written overall. Minor points:
- The one place you could tighten up the writing is the logs: there's a lot of "them", "it", "we", and it didn't quite read as in-world enough for me.
- Mechanically the two saves a round thing didn't quite strike me as the right numerical balance, but I'd have to test that out.
- I had to look up "anomaly" to find it was the "solar anomaly", you might as well include "solar" each time just to make that clear.
- "may attempt" -> under what circumstances? You could make his behaviors more fixed and based on specific triggers.
- random encounters: I wanted more!
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thanks for the specific feedback. One save a round seemed too brutal so I went to two, but someone else pointed out it's just one save with advantage which seems more elegant so I'll probably switch it to that.
I'm going to give the writing a once-over after judging so I'll look at a lot of what you've mentioned here. Thanks! I also would like more random encounters but unfortunately I don't know how to fit any more text in this thing :')