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The vibe is excellent and it is full of cool ideas. I think it may be a little too overstuffed, and would better serve a Warden if it were pruned a little so that the more important parts can be emphasized more. The random encounter table is taking quite a bit of space for essentially being different combinations of 3 NPC types. The alert system doesn't appear to have a clear mechanical effect on the rest of the adventure.

I gave you very high marks for art, writing, game design, theme, and favorability, but I think layout and utility could be improved.

Honestly I would love to see you flesh this out into an adventure that is longer than a trifold. I think there is enough here that you could develop it into a really cool multi-page adventure.

Thank you very much for the feedback. I 100% agree with your remarks. After the jam is completed, I will definitely try to take a bit more time to improve the tri-fold and perhaps consider the multi-page adventure. As I started working on this, my ideas kept expanding, and I wanted to fit them all in to make the story and worldbuilding more coherent, but that definitely hurt the layout and utility. I would say it takes quite a lot of time for the GM to prep this. So perhaps it could be a multi-page adventure one day!