That was a pretty fun little adventure, with some exciting action to carry it in the middle. I think it could stand to develop Kit's character a bit more though; in the beginning, it's hard to tell why exactly they just ran away like that. Perhaps some more specific examples of what they're going through would help them really come alive. Also, referring to the three bad guys by their footwear is great while they're still being seen from under the bed, but after Kit gets up and sees the whole of them, at least some cursory description of these characters would be nice to help set the scene more. But otherwise, it's a nice story.
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Hi! Thank you so much for reading and for your feedback!
I get what you mean about Kit's character. I was trying to make whatever was troubling them sort of ambiguous so maybe the reader could sort of fill in the blanks themself, but it does just kind of ends up feeling empty and not thought out. I also agree with you that the lack of descriptions of the hunters is a bit of a detriment to trying to imagine the scene (I'll admit, part of the reason I had them described by their footwear was so I could get out of describing their physical appearance, as I suck at descriptions lol).
Thanks again for your feedback! :)