Okay, this was very, very good. I can tell you put a lot of effort in the worldbuilding, and it feels really deep, like there's more to explore beyond the text. I also enjoyed the Rashomon-style POV change midway - you could tell in the first part that Syrol run'Pror was very biased and even prejudiced, so it was nice to see the situation from another perspective that we got to compare it with.
As far as criticism, the beginning felt a little hard to get through as the worldbuilding came in hard and fast. But, as the plot fell into a groove, it all started to feel natural. Syrol run'Pror was a bit annoying, but I get the feeling that's intentional, and the other POVs certainly do seem to validate that. The text would, of course, benefit from some editing (wouldn't any?) but there wasn't anything that bad really.
All in all, an interesting glimpse into what's clearly a very deep and well-developed world. Great job!