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Okay, this was very, very good. I can tell you put a lot of effort in the worldbuilding, and it feels really deep, like there's more to explore beyond the text. I also enjoyed the Rashomon-style POV change midway - you could tell in the first part that Syrol run'Pror was very biased and even prejudiced, so it was nice to see the situation from another perspective that we got to compare it with. 

As far as criticism, the beginning felt a little hard to get through as the worldbuilding came in hard and fast. But, as the plot fell into a groove, it all started to feel natural. Syrol run'Pror was a bit annoying, but I get the feeling that's intentional, and the other POVs certainly do seem to validate that. The text would, of course, benefit from some editing (wouldn't any?) but there wasn't anything that bad really. 

All in all, an interesting glimpse into what's clearly a very deep and well-developed world. Great job!

Are you telling me you didn't immediately fall head-over-heels for the small, noble lady?  I'm truly shocked! Not really

Bias in the POVs was a big part of the story/themes when writing, so it's a great relief that they were picked up on.  These are all characters who are operating on incomplete information, trying to coexist, with varying levels of interest in said coexistence.  It was a lot of fun contrasting Syrol and Jorjun, especially as it relates to someone with far more years of life experience versus someone who wants more.  

I greatly appreciate the feedback.  I'd love to write more with this setting in the future.