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I thought it was good. It was just a bit long-winded, was all. Although, I was expecting a sadder ending, one of longing, considering the title of the story was called Limerence. I was expecting a more bittersweet story, not a hopeful one. That somehow makes it feel as if they didn't have limerence, since they technically mutually reciprocated each other's company and feelings, even if they both didn't entirely realize that. However, having looked up the definition of limerence, I can see the meaning behind it in the context of this story. Again, it was well-written. The pacing was just slow and meandering at times from its purple prose to its descriptive narration.

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Thanks, that's good to know! I see your point about the reaction, and perhaps some better foreshadowing would have helped sell her response better. Although I'm done with Limerence for the time being, this is all useful feedback to consider for when I write future stories

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